Yeah I did have bigger plans for The Club section of the tease, but due to said random elements and also time constraints/laziness on my part I didn't flesh them out fully. While writing the tease I found it was far harder to make the tasks immersive than it usually is for me to make sessions with the Original Sin's various Mistresses immersive, and so I decided to make them a bit shorter. It also doesn't progress the story, and so I didn't pay it as much attention as the rest of the tease.paswis wrote:PinkDKB, I'm a very loyal and big fan of your series. But I gotta admit that I didn't enjoy Part 13. Let me tell you why.
Warning: Spoilers ahead!
I think the whole setting had room for so much more. I was disappointed time and time again when a "day" just had one little task and that was it. It seemed like it didn't even matter. Tying myself up or something took almost always longer than the task itself. When I tied myself for the part where you get tipped in your mouth, ass, etc., I hoped that the tease demands that I stand there for a few minutes, in bondage, waiting. But it immediately told me that the day is over again and it was all for nothing. :( A real bonerkiller.
And I didn't like the ending too. At first it was a great idea and I loved kneeling there, waiting. But it just went on and on and on repeating itself. I don't like randomness in teases, maybe that's why I didn't enjoy it but I just came and stopped the tease because I couldn't stand doing the exact same thing for the 4th, 5th, 6th time for the exact same task with the exact same words.
Just my humble opinion. Excuse my maybe not so well english, it isn't my first language.
I can't wait for Part 14 though, don't get me wrong. :) Maybe the ending of this last Part is spoiling an awesome new tease for the future. Still a big fan since Part 1 and I enjoyed every single part. Just this part wasn't THAT GOOD for me personally.
As for the ending, that's fair enough. I'm a huge fan of Games Room - On the Edge by D3vion and as I was using TeaseMe I wanted to do something different to the "you can cum, ruin, or be denied based on how well you've done" because I had other tools at my disposal. Admittedly it is random, but the chance of being allowed to cum is far higher than in the aforementioned D3vion tease. That said, it might not have been as fun for some people because my teases are usually a linear experience and having a section where the length relies on a random length time can be... unexpected. But I was experimenting, and not for the first time in this tease series, and I decided to take a few risks.
Thank you for the feedback, I always appreciate it regardless of whether it is positive or constructuve. As for OS 14, I've got some story ideas in mind but I'm starting to get worried that I'm caring too much about the story. I keep adding in old characters from previous teases and I'm not sure it's helping the series as a whole because, well, this isn't Breaking Bad: the story is only one element of what is first and foremost a webtease. I'm considering stepping back or trying something else for a while until I consider how I want to proceed.
I like it when the girls who are supposed to control me remind me that I am the one who's under control and there's no escape, even if the option was not my kind of thing 
Must not be used often though too keep the effet fresh.