FB: Backfire

[Incubo]

Whoops!
Missing a continue button there. Should be fixed now. Thanks for telling me.

Just in case anyone else finds anything....there is no timer longer than 30 seconds in the whole tease, so if the page isn't changing it's an error. Evidently, the last time I checked it, I made some corrections and forgot to save before publishing. I don't think there are anymore, but I certainly could have missed something.

[hhhobo]

Part 2 is very good. I did it the conservative way and was duly rewarded, although it was hard to hold it until the final approval was given. I'm going to go back and do it again and take more chances. Thanx for keeping the series going. I look forward to the next installment. I can be patient, if the same quality is maintained.

[Incubo]

Hmm...well, apparently it's not going over quite so well.
I'm guessing folks were either annoyed with the long beginning or perhaps they played it safe and didn't get enough teasing?

I don't know. Tough to say without any feed back.
So let's just take a quick vote here:

Should I keep going or just stop?

[ThomasKu]

Part 2 was quite good, but the introduction was pretty long. Some pages telling that he waited a few days in his room would have been enough. And I guess a house full of empty rooms isn't that exciting... He could have just opened three doors to find three girls, asking them for the way and/or play with them a little bit, if he dared.
Looking forward for some serious teasing/training sessions. Especially with Sasha

I like this series! Keep up the good work!

[Incubo]

I'll agree with you on that. The beginning was a bit long and had I thought about it a little more, I probably would have done it differently. Not just the tour of the house really, but all of it. I wanted things to make as much sense as possible and probably got caught up explaining too much at once.

The approach for meeting the girls was largely driven by the pictures actually. Here they were tied up in various ways...I just decided there needed to be an appropriate place where they could be and at least some reason why they'd be there. Plus...each girl's condition/attitude should give you at least a little hint about what they like for later.

On that note: I should ask everyone....
Does anyone know who "Rachel" and "Melissa" are? I made up those names because I have no idea who these two girls are. If I can't figure it out, then I can't put those two in later parts as those are the only pictures I have of them.

Probably should have thought of that before too.

Edit: Never mind on Rachel. I found her name. Still don't know Melissa's though.

[yak14]

I also like the series very much. With part 2 the introduction is very long and a little bit lame, but the following discoveries in the basement are really a very good compensation to that. At least, if you dare to play with the girls, though forbidden to do so.
And with the possible consequences you might face when playing the tease for the first time, it might get too dangerous to really annoy Sandra...

Please keep going!

[paddy23]

here is a list of models from 'melissa' site....not sure that helps though....http://www.ddfprod.com/models

[Incubo]

Thanks paddy.
While I'm not entirely positive, it looks an awful lot like "Alexis"
I'll do some more digging when I have chance, but that at least gives me somewhere to start.

For those wondering...."Rachel" is actually Jelena Jenson. Just wish I'd known that before I renamed her.

[les]

I was thinking perhaps you could mix up the intros of story girls and rooms a bit
So hes thinking about things as he walks around , each piece of jig saw entwining.
so he muses his dilemma while coming upon the rooms with and without girls.
the one thing I really hate about flash teases no one seems to say you are at the end
web teases you get the vote page.
but a
that's all folks
would be nice




................................................. Les

[sashacd]

Incubo,

I did part one yesterday and the second part today. I enjoyed the storytelling aspect of how and why someone was caught in a certain situation. The first part set up the storyline wonderfully, and makes for a good series, if you continue it.
In the beginning of the second part it did get a little long. I did understand the need to create a total atmosphere, so I got the point of it. After all, the mind is the most erotic aspect to an erotic experience. I did take the more conservative route to the end and it ended well.

I have done some of the straightforward [img][img][/img][/img]do this and that teases. They have there place and are also enjoyable. If you are going to start a series then the first couple of story based series are the way to go.

Thanks for the two good stories.

[sashacd]

Sorry, disregard the img's . This computer is starting to act up. Again, enjoyable story/ tease.

[Incubo]

I was thinking perhaps you could mix up the intros of story girls and rooms a bit
So hes thinking about things as he walks around , each piece of jig saw entwining.
so he muses his dilemma while coming upon the rooms with and without girls.
the one thing I really hate about flash teases no one seems to say you are at the end
web teases you get the vote page.
but a
that's all folks
would be nice




................................................. Les

I agree les. That's usually what I try to do. I guess I just got carried away.
I'll try to keep that in check in the future.

As for the ending...don't know if you've noticed, but when the end comes, the panel on the right where buttons normally are, disappears. Essentially "blowing up" the frame. That's how you know it's the end.

[paddy23]

Thanks paddy.
While I'm not entirely positive, it looks an awful lot like "Alexis"
I'll do some more digging when I have chance, but that at least gives me somewhere to start.

For those wondering...."Rachel" is actually Jelena Jenson. Just wish I'd known that before I renamed her.

was my thinking as well, but wasn't certain

[dtspam]

As for the ending...don't know if you've noticed, but when the end comes, the panel on the right where buttons normally are, disappears. Essentially "blowing up" the frame. That's how you know it's the end.

That's not entirely true. That panel disappears, if there aren't any elements in it. So a page with just a hidden timer looks exactly the same. So it should be clear from the content, that it is the end.

[Incubo]

As for the ending...don't know if you've noticed, but when the end comes, the panel on the right where buttons normally are, disappears. Essentially "blowing up" the frame. That's how you know it's the end.

That's not entirely true. That panel disappears, if there aren't any elements in it. So a page with just a hidden timer looks exactly the same. So it should be clear from the content, that it is the end.

Really?
Not on mine. The pink panel remains even if there's a hidden timer.

If it's different for other people then I can certainly understand the complaint. I'll make sure to mention it from now on.