[FEEDBACK] Spy: EDGE of Danger

[UninvitedGeist]

Hey everyone! I just released my second tease, Spy: Edge of Danger!

Please let me know what you liked, what needs improvement, any kind of bugs, and I’m curious to know

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which girl everyone ended up choosing.

Thank you very much!!

[avatarbr]

Nice work.

I did enjoy the story, and overall the girls choices.

Just one thing. Don't know if intentional or not, but some of the early encounters, you need to click to advance texts while stroking. Since later encounters are automatic, not sureif you forgot that or wanted that way.

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I pick Mila in the end.

And I really felt bad about Agent 69 . Good write

[r0nin47]

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I chose to spare the first girl, Maya, so seeing her as a reward was a nice surprise.

[Bee4]

The first girl really made me stop and stare more than the others. I loved the blue lingerie too. I like the pace of the tease THANK YOU!!!! For not making it extremely slow.

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I first picked the informant

the first metronome tick is much louder than the others. thank you for making this. What other websites do people use I only really use reddit, pornhub, pornpics, and Milovana. I'd like to find more games out there for days Milovana has nothing new.

[EduardoBR136]

Really enjoyed the tease, the story and the girls.
Eager for more of this tease!

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i picked mila

[Waverunner02]

really hot, thank you. will play more im sure

as always, for people who played already, skipping to a chapter can help!

amazing tease, and love the fast metronome. so often teases just give you an 'edge' but then turn off the metronome instead of cranking up the speed. this was awesome, ahha

[Cooldogephone]

The concept is both amazing and fantastic. Great, great idea. Well written too. Plot works, of course. I really like the world traveling element. The airline is a fun mini game. The censor idea is fun. The variety of encounter is very, very good. Good metronome usage.


Grammar / Spelling pedantry out the way first: the second mission says "targets walks".



Recommendations and thoughts:

A really easy way to build length and keep branching paths open is to do a quest line where the player has to do 2/3 or 2/4 things to progress to the next point. "Collect two whatever".

Other mini-game type thing like that is cool and will add to the spy twist, because the spy uses the gadget here to stop the bomb, then runs over there to catch the bad girl, etc.

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I think you might want to move the Russian base encounter to later in a longer version of this tease. You might still use the mind control element and have the Russians capture her or something.... Bad guy base in Moscow is kinda a conclusion unless you have a twist!!!!

You could have a gadget that blanks the screen for hard encounters for X seconds with Y uses. You could have a metronome slow-down gadget. That's the cool thing about 007, anything you want to happen game-play wise can be techno-magicked into the story. Also, giving players agency in effecting what they see I generally like and think is good.

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Maybe have a map with places that the Russians have attacked over time, or are planning to attack. Let the player stop one of the attacks... It can be a story telling device to build a sense of urgency about saving the whole world and all.

[Shithouserydotorg]

Great tease.

Surprisingly short given the warning at the start, but the length is good, if slightly short. All girls are well chosen. Metronome speed and edge commands feel good and not out of place.

Only suggestion would be to add cum countdowns for the girls. It seems like most, if not all endings end with nutting. Personally, I felt like the everytime I was asked to cum, it kind of blindsided me.

Ofc other suggestions like a chapter select or other interactive elements are good too.

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chose Mila, the redhead (forgot her name), A, and Maya. The Redhead is super hot, wish there was more to her “punishment”, i.e. more edging or stroking

[UninvitedGeist]

Hey all! Just updated the tease a bit.

I added a chapter select and the option to have an ending with the informant!

Please let me know of any bugs, suggestions, or what you liked about it!!

[4nubis12]

Amazing tease!
Will you continue the story? I cannot wait to see what will happen next

[Errant_]

Hi UninvitedGeist,

Great work again! You're in danger of becoming one of my favorite authors

Loved the overall story, reminded me of an old favorite, "Will you save America?". The branching was great, and the scenes were well written. It did feel a tad on the short side, but I'm glad the window is open for continuing the story -- I'm excited for what might come next! I chose the boss in the end.

[Veritas1966]

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Maya, first girl from berlin

really like it, hard choice between the girls at the end. would like to try all of them but the 3rd mission is just too long. can't wait for the next update! so many amazing potentials like 2nd mission and 69. is there a pateron by any chance?