Any advice on my tease "Eat your cum for Jayden"

[monkey987]

Hi, this was my first tease and I would love some constructive criticism.

[Oldiwer]

Very nice first tease.

I like the idea that a hot woman persuades you to eat you own semen. There are not so many good Teases with cum eating and without Sissification. I'm not in Sissification but I like to be tricked into eating my own cum, so there should be more teases in this style.

The pictures are hot and your text is well written. But some more slides would be a benefit to the tease. Some more slides where Jayden describes you why she would like you to eat it, why you should like it, more teasing, manipulation and persuasion.

In my opinion a longer warm up phase would be good, too. I myself don't get aroused so fast, that I have precum after one fast edge. I like longer stroking and eding to get really aroused so that a girl can bring me to do everything for her.

In the end I was not fully manipulated into drinking my own semen by your tease. And I also prefer to eat without having my feet over the head. But tis is my personal preference.
In my opinion you were really persuaded to eat it, if you did not shoot it directly in your mouth but shoot it somewhere elase and eat it up after you orgasm.

Keep on trying bringing us more teases. Every new tease is an enrichement for the Milovana community.

[Sisyphuster]

I think it looks like a great tease, but the awkward and sometimes incorrect grammar and punctuation made it difficult for me.

[monkey987]

Thanks I am thinking of making a new tease and these comments really help.