I've been out of the habit of writing for a while, I wanted to start a new series to try to get it kickstarted a little so I can get back to finishing some overdue projects. Feel free to leave any feedback here, especially since I might be pushing the envelope a little. If not, I do feel like this is a series I could run with for a little bit.
I think this tease is absolutely brilliant!! I for one love teases with story lines, in particular story lines that draw you in to 1) make you feel like you're actually there and 2) wrap you up so you can't escape. The way you've woven this setup does both of those things in a simple yet profound way! I for one cannot wait to read more, and I hope this tease series is a long one!
I agree, it is a very good tease, maybe One of the best according to its storyline. The style is amazing and it contains alot of effort. It might become my favourite series and im curious too. How often Do you plan to release the teases?
I've always enjoyed your teases.. they are some of the best on the site.
With that said, if you want constructive criticism, I thought that the same pictures were on too long... more changes of photos would intensify the feeling.
That may be nit-picking... but I thought you might want something more than how amazingly awesome your teases are.
I love it! It's a little bit weird with the siblings and all but it's a great tease! Can this be one of those teases that has an option to cum though? I hate it when there's a great tease that always denies you at the end...
Side note, I was so bored over the past little while with new teases! Thanks so much to you, mrCH and Ms. Julia for their phenomenal teases! These are truly godsends!
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Such an amazing tease and so wonderfully put together!!! The storyline is great and I can't wait for Part 2 to come out. I honestly didn't mind the cum denial at the end because I was so much anticipating the "hopefully soon" release of Part 2.
An absolutely brilliant tease, hopefully this series will become as long as your last one (another favourite, ruined by sisters which could also have been longer lol). Can't wait for future installments now, feels like a TV series that's left on a cliffhanger.
PS unlike Fenway i'm delighted that you don't get to finish at the end, prefer them this way and always try to hang on till the very end of the series (or even 2 series).
1885's at it again - fantastic! Thanks for this one, 1885, and hopefully we'll see more installments soon. One thing i really appreciate in your teases is the timing on reading, counting - like the swats - you have it down much better than most for not letting the screen sit so long it becomes tedious - great flow. Thanks again!
I also thought this was a fantastic tease which captured the storytelling element with greater immersion than possibly any other tease that I've completed. The first thing that I look for in a flashtease is diversity of choice - being able to choose different options and possibly alter the story with my choices - but the story was so well-told that I didn't even notice the lack of interactivity.
Someone mentioned that the picture doesn't change very often and while I agree that slightly more changes would be a benefit, it can be hard to get access to sets like this. The picture changes would have to be with the same clothing (whereas most sets have each consecutive image being more lewd than the last) and ideally the same position, and there would have to be a lot of them. Ultimately I think that the tease doesn't suffer badly from this and I'd almost go as far as calling it a non-issue.
The only notable criticism I can offer is that, contrary to what other people have said, I don't like the autotimer of most of the story. I don't know if I read much more quickly than is average, but the wait timer for every little sentence was incredibly painful to me - especially as there were so many consecutive sentences. An option to continue without waiting for the timer would have allowed me to read the text and not sit around waiting afterwards. That said, you clearly know what you're doing and it was obviously an intentional design decision to produce the tease without such an option so I'll simply repeat that this was an excellent tease that I enjoyed greatly and am anticipating the second part of eagerly.
