Quickie with Sandee - FEEDBACK

[Nezhul]

A so-so tease. I mean the tease itself is pretty bad, but I can see the effort. Good enough for the first time, but pretty unplayable nevertheless.

FIrst of all, the tease needs no interaction. It's simple timed commands. The tease goes on timers all the way from 1st page to last, no buttons whatsoever. The problem with that is, that men are all different, and there's NO GUARANTEE that the player will edge in time when you ask him to. And if this happens then the consistency of the tease falls apart like a card house.
Second thing - the one-minute timer at the start to get hard. I mean, how hard was it to make a button for that? Why do I have to sit and wait for one minute doing nothing if I'm hard already? And it's not like it's intended to check if you can get hard in a minute - there's no consequences for NOT being hard after a minute. Stroking simply starts.
Third thing I'm noticing is the commands to edge. "Edge!" she says. And for me that means "Edge and let go". But after that she asks you to "Hold that edge" which I would lose already. Again, there's no guarantee I even get to the edge that fast.
There's no problem with holding it as such, but right after holding the edge you command to stroke slowly again. I mean look - holding the edge IS stroking slowly for most guys. To get off the edge, you'll need to stop stroking. It's not as bad of a flaw, because I can go stroke once every 20 seconds technically, but really that doesn't even count as stroking for me. When I'm asked to stroke slowly that means that my hand still moves more than it doesn't and that way I won't get off the edge.
Another thing is the consistency of a tease. Basically most of the tease you stroke for a different girl than you start and finish with. Why? How is it explained? It isn't. This breaks the "story", makes it way too unnatural and surreal, because the presence of another girl, as well as her disappearence to nothingness is not explained. If you'd take some effort about writing a story AROUND it, it would be so much better. Say, the first girl says "It's boring working you up all by myself. My slavegirl Sandy will work you up, so you return to me nice and hot already!". One phrase like that will explain EVERYTHING. Why another girl bumps in, why she's ready to tease you right away, why she steps out later. And the tease gets so much consistent.
On the same note, it'd be better to give a palyer some understanding on what's going on. Who are these girls, why are they teasing you. What's their motivation, how did you meet them and get into stroking situation... The tease is MUCH better if it has background, depth, the feeling of being part of something. Not just commands.

All in all, the tease is pretty bad. But I'm sure you can make your other teases better.