I think you have a great song selection, and your clip selection is fantastic! This kind of gives me warm-up vibes because of the way the women are moving, so maybe you'd want to half the speed for most of the song- a slow beat to get the viewer into it. That's just my impression though. This is ...

Hey there, I've taught a little bit of basic English and am a native speaker. I'd be happy to help! I'd probably ask a few questions to make sure we get the right subtext, but if you're willing to work with me there, I would love to help you out!