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Feedback: Kenna Keyholder
Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2015 1:04 pm
by slaveashish
bennygrimm,
Absolutely loved this tease
. Great idea and the delivery is excellent as well. The fact that this is your first tease makes it all the more special. I hope that there are many more to come.
Thanks,
Ashish
Re: Feedback: Kenna Keyholder
Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2015 10:57 pm
by Sisyphuster
I agree!
Re: Feedback: Kenna Keyholder
Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2015 6:50 am
by teased
+1!!
Re: Feedback: Kenna Keyholder
Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2015 1:08 pm
by bennygrimm
Thanks all! Appreciate the feedback!
Re: Feedback: Kenna Keyholder
Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2015 9:06 pm
by mr-max
I liked it as well. Great model, nice idea!
In the end it got a bit rapid. After the really nice slow build up of the story it was a bit quick and fast paced in the end for my taste! ;)
Moaning on high level here.
Re: Feedback: Kenna Keyholder
Posted: Fri May 01, 2015 3:27 am
by bennygrimm
You're absolutely right. I set a page limit for myself to try and prevent rambling, and so the ending got really contracted. There's a reasonable likelihood of a part two or something that expands the story though.
Re: Feedback: Kenna Keyholder
Posted: Mon Aug 03, 2015 4:46 pm
by ruinforyoo
Loved it. So original. Thanks
