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This tease has taken me an age to complete, and have had some major issues with the NYX editor. When adding new pages I've had to increase the page number by two every time (?) and having completed the tease I lost the last part again. I think there may be a limit of around 190 pages - is this right? So I had to curtail the ending a bit which is a shame, but still.... hopefully what is there works okay and you all enjoy it!

666 wrote:I think there may be a limit of around 190 pages - is this right?

I don't think so. My last tease had over 1000 pages. As far as I know there is no actual limit, but after several hundred pages the saving process of the nyx editor gets really slow. So I used a back up of the nyx script in a txt file and if I had to edit the script manually I did it with a text editor in the txt file.

Right, I think next time I will just break it up into chapters...

I loved the tease :)

I don't do many teases these days, because most don't hold my interest beyond a few pages. But this one was amazing. I don't think I've ever edged that much. And I had to ruin my orgasm towards what looked like the end, when I had to hold it and she flashed her ass. That just sent me over the edge (what can I say, I'm an ass man :P). I'm definitely going to try it again, and hopefully complete it this time.

Are you going to make this a series? That would be fantastic.

Great tease. Very intense, I loved it.

Thanks guys, very kind. You wouldn't believe how long it took to do this tease.... months to get it finished, unfortunately I just don't have the time available that I used to. I just wish I could have got the editor to save the original ending... ah well. Maybe at some point in the future I will do part two. Glad the scores gone up a bit (started at 3.5).

One thing I will say right away - I HATE seeing a tease end if you pick the wrong button. And the first choice of a tease is a perfect example. Why the hell does it end if I think we'r NOT in a different legues? I can understand if a girl gets more cruel if you pick that option, but ending a tease is just not fun. If you present a CHOICE, then be ready to give it. Instead you actually give no choice, but put a frustrating (in a bad way) breakpoint in your story, that completely ruins the mood.
That's just my opinion, but I will stress the point on this being a rather cheap move that a lot of authors use. Either present no chooice, or make a tease twist and bend and play this choice through without stopping the tease.
I didn't resume playing the second time after the second breakpoint, because my mood was actually pretty ruined when you prompt a player to agree he's a loser or (again) end the tease. Now I know there's such thing as humiliation and all, but that's just irrational. THings said in the intro make the tease really unbalanced and you play a TEASE, you don't feel like it's a girl before you. No girl actually will say such things. it's jjust stupid and silly. What if I'm NOT a looser then? What if I'm a real damn man who nevertheless would agree to be bound by her will sexually because of a kink? It's strange. The tease is pointed on a certain auditory, but then again instead of dominant narration you are presented with a choice that punishes you for not acting according to a certain script. It doesn't provide interaction, because there's no interaction. How hard would it be to add an extra tasks if you thing you are equal to her, and make it easier for "losers"? How hard would it be to JUST add a different text page that will play on yopur feelings and then continue on the tease, with no consequences. A page like "You think we are equal? For now I just can't agree with you. Well, how about prooving it, have you got a nerve?".... It doesn't change ANYTHING in a tease, not even her attitude. But what it does is making the choice REAL.

also, with such long timer-based intro you should at least put a button in the beginning to skip it.

I won't rate the tease, I didn't see it's body, but if I would rate it it would be 1 star less just for the problems above. Hope you will see my point and avoid it in the future, thus making a better for everyone teases, where some will agree to be pin-dick losers, and some will try to prove otherwise and maybe pay for it.

I meant to put a skip intro piece in there.... and I made it so that you had to disagree twice before you got booted.... to be honest by the end I was so pissed of with the NYX editor I'm amazed I bothered finishing it at all.

Also, I think perhaps you are taking this a bit too seriously don't you? Of course it's silly, it's fantasy... you are masturbating to a fictional woman, who I am 'voicing'. I would humbly suggest that my teases are better than 80% of what gets on the site, some of which are really quite dreadfully poor.

But, you know, if you don't like the way my tease goes, chose another one...

To be honest I'm not a fan of teases that end because of a wrong choice either, but I didn't experience that in this tease so its all good on my end. I'm hugely into humiliation, so obviously I picked right. I'm glad you finished it, and really hope to see you do more teases, especially if they're within the same "series". Maybe add some more humiliation play :P