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Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2012 5:16 pm
by UnRelease
[UPDATED VIDEO LINK]

I hope this is the right place for this.

I just released my first tease called 'Some mildly evil fun'
You can find it here: http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=18132

Description: Roughly an hour long, contains lots of stroking, edging and not stroking plus a couple extras. A shoelace, string or similar object may be required. Should get pretty intense. My first tease, Feedback is appreciated.

The video can be found here: http://www.xvideos.com/video1837701/isa ... m_and_cums

If anyone is interested in giving me any kind of feedback, i would welcome it.
I'm particularly interested in how well certain elements worked for you.

Specifically:

-The secret timers. Does the mystery add to the experience or are they just annoying? Did I use too many? Too few? Just right?

-The amount of story. This tease only has a story in a sense that I tried to give every encounter a unique and consistent character. Did you find that immersive or would you have preferred more context? Less?

-The pacing. The way stress and relief elements work togther, i.e. the changing of more intense and less intense parts. Did you find the amount of each sufficient and well placed? Or did you feel that the pacing was off?

-Raw intensity. What level of difficulty would you consider this? Did you ever have trouble or was it all just a breeze?

-Were you ever bored or felt that the activities were not varied enough?

-Anything else you particularly liked/disliked?

-The activities. All the stuff you did other than stroking. What worked for you and what didn't?

-Bugs or mistakes. If you find any, let me know and I'll try to fix it.

Thank you for trying out my tease and hopefully for giving me feedback, so I can make even better ones in the future.
(Because I find that creating webteases is simply a very rewarding creative activity and it's just plain fun :D)

Forgive me for dragging on, have a nice day.

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2012 2:14 am
by jayjaysub
This is one of the best teases I've ever seen here... I only have one negative thing to say:
After all the amazing girls, sizzling hot girls... the last 2 pictures where we are allowed to cum are of a far less attractive girl... a "porn pro" rather than the girl next door orjust sizzling gorgeous type of girl... it was a bit of a let down.

Everything else about it was excellent -- and darn near perfect.

Jay

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2012 3:24 am
by jstwolf
Looks really awesome so far. Going to give it a shot. The only thing I recommend, is for video links, post them here. Its a major speed bump to have to type in a link to a video mid tease. Just post a list of them here so that we can easily pop over, click on the link and go.

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2012 9:18 am
by ka42
I did this tease

It was really nice, but to be honest it doesn't drove me crazy.
The storyline was real great, especially the end where all girls again show up, good job.

The stroking part wasn't exhausting me enough. I like fast paces.

Keep going, just make it a little harder, more edges and more forced strokings
Spoiler: show
At one scence after edging you have to choose how horny you are that was really really great! How did you get to that idea? I really liked it. If you use that kind of stuff more it is really impossible to get to the end :)

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2012 11:36 am
by UnRelease
Thanks for all your feedback so far, some possible improvements are very hard to find without an outside perspective.

I sort of agree about the last 2 pictures, I guess I ran out of steam and patience and just couldn't wait to publish it, so the ending never sat quite right with me in general. I might change that in the future.

There is only one video, so you won't be taken out of the action again, but you're right, I'll post the link at the top of the thread.

I expected that some of you, who maybe do very intense and very long teases may not be challenged by this. I personally usually just lose motvation and give up on those, so I tried to do something the average user might find challenging without actually having trouble getting through. I originally planned multiple difficulty settings and a few differences depending on your choice Sissy/Real man at the start, but so far I couldn't get it to work right.
Spoiler: show
I'm not sure how I got that idea, I'm pretty sure I've seen it been done somewhere, but I can't remember. I thought it would be a nice way to get people with different stamina onto the same page. I'm glad you liked it, I'll definitely do more of that in the future.
Again, thanks for your feedback, I'll keep changing little things here and there.

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2012 1:26 pm
by Venus
A very good and solid tease.

But there were some things that were really annoying. Mostly there are two different stroking paces: "stroke as fast as you can" and "hands off/stop stroking/squeezing". More variety in the paces would be great.

Talking about variety. Did you notice that all girls are of the same kind? Brown eyes and brown long hair ;-)

And sometimes a little bit more "build up time" before an edge would be good. You can't expect someone to be close to an edge if the one stopped stroking for one or two minutes (or 11 minutes).

Keep up the good work and I hope to see more teases from you in the future.

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2012 8:11 pm
by d3vi0n
Looks very promising! :w00t: :wave: I'll try it out as soon as possible. btw... there is already a high resolution import for TeaseMe (thx to lynchy). I'm looking forward to your next teases!

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 3:29 am
by dbt
Great tease. Regarding the girls being similar, I liked it - they were all hot. I agree with the comment about the last couple pics though, I'd have preferred any of the previous models.

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 3:46 am
by UnRelease
Alright, I think I have a clearer image of what I could have done better.
I'll reexamine the pacing and see if I can adjust some things to make it flow better.

I must admit I never for a second noticed that the girls were all similar.
I was just skimming through the usual sources discarding everything I didn't really, really like and used whatever was left. There is a lesson about my taste in there somewhere...

I'll definitely change the ending as soon as I find something more worthy.

I'd also like to try adding metronome sounds to the tease to make it more convenient, but where do you get the sound files? I've seen many online sites, but I haven't seen an option to download it as a sound file.

One last thing, I'm starting to think that I never really thought the video idea through and that it worked better in my head than in reality. So what do you think I should do?
Get completely rid of the video and replace it with something else?
Make it completely optional?
Or keep it the way it is?

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 5:38 am
by real-webjunky
Hi,

i really liked the tease - an gave full points -

well - i didn't get the "story" - but didn't miss it too much ... :lol:
the girls are all very sweet - much enough for a man in the middle of the night.
the video was a very good choice for me
and about the last pictures - they stopped me from cumming in the end - and isn't that what we are looking for? :-D

best regards

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 9:17 am
by sl.adam
Loved the tease (the not being allowed to touch during the video was evil, brilliant!) but I think I found a bug: I got stuck in what seemed an endless loop (over an hour, I gave up after 15 mins though). The "slide" is the one that ends with "the secret is:" with a 30 second timer. Once it hit 0, it came back to 30 and that went on and on.

Wonderful tease though (what I saw of it) and I will try it again soon!

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 10:00 am
by WShadow
I agree really nice tease, but also got stuck on screen which says exactly:

1 stroke every 3 seconds.
Do you really wanna know the secret? It is something to do with that orgasm,
you are probably planning to have later...
All right I'll tell you. The secrets is:

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 10:37 am
by UnRelease
So sorry about that, I was playing around a little yesterday and I must have totally overlooked that.

It should be fixed now, if you find anything else wrong, let me know.

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 11:15 am
by janmb
Great tease indeed - just completed the teaseme version, loved it :smile:

For some reason I found the stamina challenges really hard, despite having done many other teases that require you to go both fast and a lot longer than this... So just goes to show itæs the sexiness that matters most in terms of making it hard to last I guess - and not just speed.

Well done :-D

Re: Feedback: Some mildly evil Fun

Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2012 11:55 am
by Pontos
i'm stuck. quite at the end(?). girl in jeans-hotpants, open button. text is "Do the ok sign again. Hold 3 seconds, do it 5 times." if i click on continue, nothing happens... until there, it was fun though.