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My dream...

Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2012 6:25 pm
by Oda
So there was I... in a dark room kneeling naked in front of my domme. My heart is pumping like crazy as I look down at the ground. I don´t dare to look up to her... to look into her beautiful eyes. Still I am excited and that is easy to see, as my cock is full hard. Still I don´t look up to her and just hear her giggle a bit...

That giggle from her... I feel it like a lightning trough my body, which is causing goosebumps on my skin. I hope so much, that she is enjoying this as much as I do. I am so curious.... so excited, but she lets me wait. I try to avoid it with all I have, but in the end I lost. I looked up, just for a second... just for an blink of an eye, to see her. She just wears panties and nothing else and still it were her panties, which caught my eyes.

She must have been noticed this short look and giggles again. I can feel that she enjoys to tease me and then I see, as I am looking at the ground, that she gets rid of her panties... a shiver runs trough my body. The tough, that she is standing in front of my, without her panties is exciting me even more.

She takes her time... she lets me wait a little bit longer, but then I feel one of her hand touching my head. Gently the hand walks to the back of my head, as she pushes me slowly between her legs. I can´t believe it and I feel my heart pumping again. I am a bit nervous... I want her to be pleased... and so I give my best to work my tongue on her pussy.

The times goes by and I hear her moan a bit. It makes me happy to hear it and motivates me on the same time and so I lick harder and faster...

“Stroke it...”

I can´t believe what I hear, but I do as she says and so I am stroking, while I am licking the pussy of my domme. It doesn´t took long till she cums... I keep the same pace the whole time she is cumming, to make sure she can enjoy her orgasm. As she calmed down a bit and I still licking her she talks again to me...

“You can stop... licking and stroking...”

I stop with both, as she told me... horny and frustrated without an orgasm... still I loved every second of it... and so I thank my domme for this kind of pleasure...

“Thank you, for allowing me this honor...”

Another giggle from her as she pets my head gently another time...

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 12:33 am
by SexualChoc
nice short story
just one question
how is it easy to see in a dark room?
candles? maybe? some romantic mood?

but it is much easier to look at wheat someone else wrote.. and comment.
It is more difficult to wite the story with just a blank screen

In other words
thank you for a great job
with a touching and realistic short story.

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 9:01 am
by Banquo
Wonderful story Oda, I'm so pleased you decided to share it with the community. Great work :-D
Choc wrote:how is it easy to see in a dark room?
In a darkened room your eyes will actually adjust to the light levels, it's only in an area of pitch blackness that you would be truly unable to see, so in an underground mine for example.

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 10:46 am
by les
Banquo wrote:Wonderful story Oda, I'm so pleased you decided to share it with the community. Great work :-D
Choc wrote:how is it easy to see in a dark room?
In a darkened room your eyes will actually adjust to the light levels, it's only in an area of pitch blackness that you would be truly unable to see, so in an underground mine for example.

Slate or Coal?

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 12:22 pm
by Nezhul
how is it easy to see in a dark room?
dark doesn't mean pitch dark, and the sources of light may be different, even the moon outside provides enought light to see quite good detail.

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 12:35 pm
by Oda
Thank you SC and Banq for your little feedback :)

And yes... i meant not a complete dark room, maybe there would have been another way to put that in words, but to be honest... my english isn´t good enough to see that way :)

But i am sad, that i see more comments about that sentence, than about my story...

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 12:55 pm
by Banquo
les wrote: Slate or Coal?
Allow me to let Tony answer this one for me....


Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 1:24 pm
by les
Oda wrote:
But i am sad, that i see more comments about that sentence, than about my story...


Any activity in a thread encourages other to read and so your readership increases.

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 2:25 pm
by SexualChoc
Appologies Oda

was intended to be a bit of a jset.

As I said I loved the story

sounded very much like
a real session!

and it was sensual and well thought out.

I honestly did not mean any disrespect.

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 3:36 pm
by Oda
SC... that wasn´t against you. You gave a feedback and that is ok. I didn´´t se it like you disrespected me at all.

To les... i see 2 feedbacks to my story, which is fine and i don´t expect a feedback from every user, but you have posted the second time in here and wasn´t able to say even one sentence to my story... so thank you for trying to encourage other people to feedback my story, but maybe you could start with your own.

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 4:31 pm
by DellaRoss
Okay I just have to say that is one heck of a dream Yoshi :-D I for one think that this was well written and of course your English is not perfect but I think that it is still pretty good for a second language. I think that the story is perfect as it is. I understood he meant that the rom was low lighted so I think that is not really a snag in the flow of the story. I found the use of "my Domme " slightly repetitive but not really a problem either just a personal thing.

All in all a lovely story and I am glad you chose to post this dream of yours

Della the Blackbird
= (^v^) =

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 6:14 pm
by les

As always the effort put in by the author shows through.

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 7:31 pm
by Oda
les wrote:
As always the effort put in by the author shows through.
Are you serious? I am starting to think, that the only thing you can do is being disrespectful to the people. If you don´t want to give some real feedback so bad, it´s ok... then just don´t do it. But then stay away from the thread!

To the others... thank you very much for the feedback :)

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 7:51 pm
by les

It is mentioned that your first language is not English but you efforts to produce a good story show that this has not hampered you.

I enjoyed it and look forward to the sequels which you must write.
and maybe a prequel as well.

Re: My dream...

Posted: Sun Jul 15, 2012 7:35 am
by Oda
Thank you, les.