Milovana.com

Long time lurker and visitor of the site, I finally decided to try my hand at writing my first webtease.

I'm interested in hearing what everybody has to say about it. Any suggestions or tips for improvements are welcome. I'm considering making another 2 or 3 parts to this series, depending on how many pics I can find. I just stumbled across this girl earlier this afternoon and she blew me away.

In the past, I've enjoyed some branching path teases to allow for exploration of different kinks and fetishes. I didn't want to make this tease too long for the average user, but let me know if you think it could be longer. As a primarily action based tease, I felt that 40-50 pages would be too long, even though I've liked much longer teases here.

Any feedback on the model is welcome and I'd love to hear suggestions for anyone else that you'd like to see in the series. I'd like to incorporate a "friend" or two of the model's into the storyline. Let me know if you're interested in seeing more and exactly what you'd like to see me put into the series.

Thanks for the feedback.

I read through it and thought it was an excellent tease. I'd love to see a series made of this. I thought the chance ending was excellent, maybe some more things being left to chance throughout the series would be good.