Playful wife
Posted: Fri Aug 03, 2007 11:40 am
feedback peeps? hope you enjoy 
i know i did 
i know i did Page 1 of 1
Posted: Fri Aug 03, 2007 9:08 pm
I so want to be the guy who gets kicked in the balls by her.
Posted: Fri Aug 03, 2007 10:21 pm
so wish she was my wife and i knew were TomTheOne lived.
Posted: Sat Aug 04, 2007 8:33 am
Great, great tease! I thought the model was awesome, the pacing was good. The playful tone is always such a turn-on for me, and you stayed pretty consistent with that throughout.
However, there were a few spelling/syntax problems that I noted. I hope you'll get around to fixing those soon. (Maybe I've just got to be patient and wait a couple days after you publish your next tease.)
But despite that issue, the tease earned a 5 from me! I must echo Prisoner's remark.
-joeliwan
However, there were a few spelling/syntax problems that I noted. I hope you'll get around to fixing those soon. (Maybe I've just got to be patient and wait a couple days after you publish your next tease.)
But despite that issue, the tease earned a 5 from me! I must echo Prisoner's remark.
-joeliwan
Posted: Sat Aug 04, 2007 10:15 am
aye i know, i have a problem with not being bothered with editing lol, like with my last one, i can't edit that one due to it being in the totm, but i will get round to it as i always do.
thanks btw all
thanks btw all
Posted: Sun Aug 05, 2007 7:33 pm
awesome tease, and gotta agree with tom