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Well a new tease, I thought that it was crap lol but any way hopefully someone will like it.

I know there are spelling mistakes but if you can get over that for a day or two ill get round to editing it.

Any way enjoy

oh and i just thought i'd mention i'm currently making one that someone requested so look out for that in the near future.

Wow!

That was really great! Seriously, that tease worked for me. I like a little pain, but not too much, so that element was spot on. And it was a creative presentation of a relatively typical fantasy. Definitely got a 5 from me.

Man, you seem to be firing on all cylinders! Keep up the great work.

-joeliwan

Oh, nearly forgot. Yes, the spelling mistakes were a bit annoying. I'm glad to hear you plan on editing those out soon. But seriously, after a few pages the occasional mistake barely registered with me.

Funny how those higher brain functions tend to slip once in a while.

-joeliwan

hey thanks lol, Not to sound to egocentric but i think i could of done much better