Milovana.com

Please tell me what u think about it

What i did right

What i did wrong

what i did too much of

spelling mistakes etc etc

you should do a nyx editor tease, maybe have each girl tell you how to stroke it, slowly, quickly, squeezing the balls softly, squezzing the balls hard, stroking softly, stroking hard, pulling the balls softly, pulling balls hards, massaging the balls or even not touch at all, and set a time limit for each picture...kind of like redlight greenlight, stop and go, high and low. loved all that pictures gianna michaels has to be one of the qutest white chicks in porn.

Great tease. Well i guess it wasnt reall a tease but it was great. I loved the pictures. The chick who was my wife was so hot! This was great and i hope for more! I appreciate all the time you put into it. How long did it take?

Just personal opinion, but there could be just a little more text per page. All the clicking and time spent on a page versus waiting for it to load was a bit unbalanced.

This is an insanely long tease, and it's obvious you put a lot of work into the instructional part of it. That being said, many of the story elements are lifted word-for-word from different erotic stories I remember reading years ago, namely Kicking the Habit (http://www.asstr.org/~spunknwagnels/kicking.html) and Call Me Big Blue Balls (http://www.asstr.org/~Kristen/06/bluballs.txt). I find it a little dubious to ask for feedback and not point that out. Just sayin'.

Very well done, I was on edge the entire tease. But then the last picture came up, and I burst out laughing and it kind of killed it lol. There are a few spelling and grammatical errors, but in a 200 page tease its going to happen

Actually, I did barrow content once
for teases but that was AFTER trying to reach the original author
being unable to do so, checking with Seraph,
And THEN posting the tease.

but I agree with 1885
You could have at least given
compliments and/or a link to original source
(as I did)

Well, wow what a long story and whatever the source great mash up with pictures. Loved the wife, she was wicked. I'm a pedant, so normally the mistakes would annoy, but I kept reading so that is a credit to you.

Story teases are good and it is nice to just read and enjoy.

The tags say for-gals, but this is definitely for-guys.

It is too long. Should be broken up into phases/girls. And that would allow you to add more content as the tease goes on.

I definably liked the first setup phase. An expanded section with a lot more public humiliation would have been real great. Pics were great, story was great.

My major problem with the whole tease was the very poor editing. I think i found like 10 significant errors on each page. And that doesn't count missing periods. Saw very few of them.

Hey Mr BB, the habit is kicking me. Into your fantasy: Hot for my mean sort of wife, a real Queen with Queen tits ... but she is always pushing something ... and now the party, the shock that my wife is manipulating me through her girl friends. They are all in on the joke, they love it ... especially how I am banded like a pigeon with a devise that interrupts ones climax ... of course my ace in the hole is my healthy 9 inch cock ... but I can't feeling slightly smaller than my cock, like its bigger then me, where it goes I goes. But the doc, she provides cream, her cream to cream by balls should frustration sore them. And on ... am ape on your work MrBB .. the cougar who I lusted for the moment she appeared has just entered my room and complained of sexual frustration because her husband is small and ineffectual ... she too is so hot ...

Honestly one of my favorite teases ever! I was going crazy the whole time. And the same for your previous, similar content teases. Please keep making more just like this

one of the best!!! EVER!!