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I just published my 1st flash tease. 1st and foremost if there are any bugs or loops please let me know. I went through it but might have missed something.

This has been a idea in my head for a while and with my work schedule it took some time. I've got a day off tomorrow so going to write part 2 then..or at least the majority of it.

Comments?

By the way view in full screen some of the monologue is long and if not full screen you will miss it.

the tease is:
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=13532
So you want to hire a Mistress

all2true wrote:the tease is:
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=13532
So you want to hire a Mistress

Thanks all2true forgot to include the link...

Okay I see several "problems"
You have WAY WAY to content on one screen
to much writing
How am I to read that tiny font! ??

Personally, this just me, not to sure about your choice of models.
those super Fake tits are Not a turn on for me (personally)

I'm with all2true about the models and the volume of text/screen, but I very much enjoyed the writing of the tease, it is the first in quite a while that has been really involving for me, and I genuinely wanted it to keep going and be longer. I for one am very much looking forward to/hoping for a sequel.

I actually enjoyed the models very much. Also your writing is very good.
I do agree with too much text on one screen though, try spreading it out over more pages.

do continue this though i had a lot of fun with it!

lolstick wrote: Also your writhing is very good!

That would be along with

Reeling, Writhing, Drawling, Stretching, and Fainting in Coils

hehe oops! fixed

Thanks everyone...it was my 1st flash tease and I agree that I put too much text on one page...thanks for the complements on the writing that's why I do these lol.

Everyone to their own on the models. I was looking more for scene and picture placements more than fake tits. I actually like the bigger tits myself. Sorry they don't please everyone.

all2true wrote:Okay I see several "problems"
You have WAY WAY to content on one screen
to much writing
How am I to read that tiny font! ??

Personally, this just me, not to sure about your choice of models.
those super Fake tits are Not a turn on for me (personally)

I totally agree with you about fake tits.

And thanks for this great tease.

i can't wait to see more of this series.

just wondering when we'll see part two to this tease, because I loved the first installment so much.

I've been trying to find a new apt and finally did, after tomorrow I'm off 10 days to move and get set back up. I'm going to try and do part 2 really soon.

Sorry for the delay...I've got most of the models and scene set up so just need to write the "script"