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Neighbor Doing Laundry - feedback
Posted: Sun Jun 10, 2007 4:07 am
by submatt
I incorporated a few things that I haven't in the past - wearing panties, exhibitionism, peeping tom. And I think she's a hot slightly older woman, with just enough lines in her face to make her feel like she really could be your neighbor.
Let me know what you think.
Posted: Sun Jun 10, 2007 7:59 am
by Sisser
Great tease
The only thing I noticed is she looks very tired, might need some
Posted: Sun Jun 10, 2007 9:22 am
by alpahde5
Very well written. I would say she looks more like she on crack, or someones holding up a sign with the word "boo" on it which has caused her to become scared out of her wits.
Posted: Tue Jun 12, 2007 11:44 pm
by WorkinOnIt
Great tease, really enjoyed it. Was easy to pretend it was possible!
Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 6:10 pm
by tfwater
really enjoyed the tease, nice job. :)