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By the pool
Posted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 7:48 pm
by HogtiedCowboy
Hey,
This is my first tease, let me know what you think. I hope to do a sequel later if the feedback isnt too brutal
Posted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 8:32 pm
by elgoomgnizalb
It seems to end fairly abruptly; is it supposed to?
Posted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 10:41 pm
by curved
I agree a very sudden end, and it was going really well up to that point.
Definitely do a sequel - you can't leave it like that...
Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 12:56 am
by alexi4u
It appears you meant to have a next page and ended the tease by mistake. Up to that point I would have rated it a five as the concept was very good, but got a 4 from me. Also, how could I masturbate if step-daughter has not at least temporarily unlocked me. You need a slide inserted to cover that faux pas. Also, stay away from fake breast. It took me forever to edge on the third mistress.
Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 1:13 am
by HogtiedCowboy
sorry about that, the last page wasnt included. I think i fixed it
Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 1:52 am
by dark
No problem we all make mistakes. Fortunatly nobody is perfect. Thank you for your contribution
And I closed the other thread and will delete it tomorrow. I think one thread for one tease is enough
Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 2:21 am
by HogtiedCowboy
the next one is up too now