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Hey all,

Decided to publish a tease as there has been a lot of spam lately. I have a couple others in progress, including one series.

I'm planning to base all my teases in the same fantasy world (of what description I'm not sure, but it'll certainly involve the weaker sex of males being enslaved to the females ).

I wrote this tease quite quickly, so please message me if there are any misspellings or anything that doesn't make sense!

Happy reading :)

great tease

are you planning on making a sequel?

It is certainly open to the possibility of a sequel, but if I do write one it'll be after I've expanded the universe a bit with some teases of differing themes.

I will definitely be creating a companion tease (if not a direct sequel) dealing with punishments for failing etc.
'Record Breaker' will be updated ever so slightly when I release the punishment tease.

Aside from that, I expect to re-release one of my older teases ('Luna's Dry Run'), which will eventually be a pretty big series.

I think it's going to take me a while to finish all this though!

great tease. please do make a sequel

Hi Nooble,

I think you've done a good job with this tease: it's well-written, and I found it enjoyable. A longer tease would have been nice, but I realise you wrote this quickly and you're still working on fleshing out the world in which the tease is set.

I like the idea of a series of teases set in the same persistent fantasy world, and I look forward to seeing what you come up with. Take your time with it; happy writing and creating! :)

@Nooble: I loved the concept of your tease and found it very well written. I had a little trouble getting into it at the beginning because you are instructed to get close the the edge on the second slide. My one critique would be to provide a little more warm up before jumping straight to the edge. Other than that, it was extremely hot...I loved the model...I loved the scenario...and I liked your writing a lot.

@dolphekuellar: Thanks for the feedback. Unfortunately as you guessed, I didn't have much time to extend the tease at all past what it became. If the model does another photoshoot in the future, I'll likely write a sequel to draw out that storyline a bit.

@wonderbro: Interesting you mentioned that, I considered including a couple of 'warm-up' slides but in the end I didn't have many images to work with so I decided it would be worth condensing it into a single slide (i.e. stroking at a comfortable pace for as long as you possibly can) to avoid 'wasting' the few images I had. I guess I did end up with a fair amount of edging though!

I'll probably come back and edit this tease once I've finished the couple I'm currently working on. I'll post here when I do.

very well written and nice choice of pics.really enjoyed it .good stuff like this is required to keep the site going