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red light city

Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 2:09 pm
by agus76
I'm creating a real big tease with different dozens of tease and in particular a lots of different kind of sex preferences (ts, bdsm, fantasies, sm etc).
This is only a little first part, i hope you enjoy it!

Re: red light city

Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 5:32 pm
by Quazwierdcev283
Agus,
I read through the first girl and, while this tease looks like it has potential, there are a fair amount of grammatical mistakes. So I was wondering if I could get a copy of the original script and proofread it for you or if you have a friend who can help you. Bad grammar can greatly hurt an otherwise marvelous tease. Just some constructive criticism, I'm not trying to offend, sorry if I have.

Re: red light city

Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 8:20 pm
by agus76
thank you! Dont worry, i know i speak a bad english: but i studied it ten years ago and after i never had time to learn it better... so, if someone tell me how to do a copy of my tease, i'll be really happy to see it proofreaded! (in fact i have other two tease wich need to be... checked :smile: )

But it is possible to copy a tease? or i need to give my password to someone?

waiting for answer...

Re: red light city

Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 8:31 pm
by mksl

Re: red light city

Posted: Wed May 25, 2011 12:33 am
by Quazwierdcev283
Mksl,
I guess that's one option but it's a pain to read through. I don't know how you would copy a flash tease. I wrote out my last tease in a word processor and added the pictures when/if needed.

Re: red light city

Posted: Sat May 28, 2011 1:07 pm
by groan
Hi!

Great tease! :)

But the URL for the monster cock video seems not to work (for me). Could You please correct it or post the correct url here?

Thanks!

Groan

Re: red light city

Posted: Tue Aug 02, 2011 3:41 pm
by Empath
I believe this is the correct url for anyone interested http://overthumbs.com/galleries/monster ... cocks-061/