Follow Commands
Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2011 11:03 pm
A really great tease. What you could improve though, is how you use timers sometimes.
At some points during the tease one has to do something for some time while being blindfolded.
It would be better, if the tease would use a ring sound for that, instead of requiring the reader to set up an alarm. But as long as you do that, you shouldn't use timers in the tease at the same time. The timers in the script and the alarm set up by the reader get out of sync too fast.
Most importantly, you shouldn't put any preparation instructions (blindfolding etc.) on a timed page, until you've read those and followed them, 1-2 minutes are gone.
At some points during the tease one has to do something for some time while being blindfolded.
It would be better, if the tease would use a ring sound for that, instead of requiring the reader to set up an alarm. But as long as you do that, you shouldn't use timers in the tease at the same time. The timers in the script and the alarm set up by the reader get out of sync too fast.
Most importantly, you shouldn't put any preparation instructions (blindfolding etc.) on a timed page, until you've read those and followed them, 1-2 minutes are gone.