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Follow Commands

Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2011 11:03 pm
by dtspam
A really great tease. What you could improve though, is how you use timers sometimes.
At some points during the tease one has to do something for some time while being blindfolded.
It would be better, if the tease would use a ring sound for that, instead of requiring the reader to set up an alarm. But as long as you do that, you shouldn't use timers in the tease at the same time. The timers in the script and the alarm set up by the reader get out of sync too fast.
Most importantly, you shouldn't put any preparation instructions (blindfolding etc.) on a timed page, until you've read those and followed them, 1-2 minutes are gone.

Re: Follow Commands

Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2011 4:59 am
by curiousSK
LOVED this tease, took me back to when i was just starting webteases, a lot of the teases recently have been a little too dry for my taste, this was fantastic. Great job!

Re: Follow Commands

Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2011 8:09 am
by bookworm
The list of equipment is a bit daunting! ;-)

Re: Follow Commands

Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2011 7:16 pm
by g[mx]
I agree, a great sequel to your "Follow Orders" series. Can't wait for more parts to come :w00t:

Re: Follow Commands

Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 3:47 pm
by patchwolf
+1 for more. Awesome set.

What I loved about it was there was brutal honesty throughout. No teasing lies... nothing promised but not delivered. In this case, I knew basically what to expect, but the delivery was way better than I had envisaged.