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My first tease
Posted: Fri Apr 27, 2007 6:38 am
by liljake
Boyfriend trouble is my first attempt at a tease. Hope it's ok....
Posted: Fri Apr 27, 2007 1:57 pm
by wonkywanker
you hope it's ok? I think every tease is ok because the author can bring their own personal touch to the community.
I think it was very good for a first tease, good in the sense that it appealed to me.
only criticism is, it was a bit short but otherwise a sound tease, well done.
Posted: Fri Apr 27, 2007 2:26 pm
by lagavulin_nl
I liked it too. Like Wonky said a bit short. She could definitely turn out to be very mean and humiliating in the next part.
Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 1:45 am
by liljake
This tease isn't quite so long for a couple of reasons. First, since this is my initial attempt at making a tease, I didn't want to go overboard. Second, unfortunately, it was geting late and my creativity was hitting a wall as I became more and more tired. I know I could have come back another day and worked on it, but being my first one, I wanted to post it.
Don't worry-she'll be back and even angrier for what her "boyfriend" does to her...
Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 9:21 pm
by chris100
love it m8.... fantastic first effort.....
can wait for more !! :)
Boyfriend trouble II
Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 9:28 pm
by liljake
Here you go...
She's in a nastier mood.
Thoughts? Comments?