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This is my first tease, let me know if you like it !
That scenario always turned me on so I've decided to write a tease.

Thank you for daring to write a tease!

Now, this is a suggestion,
but when you have choices in a tease
You may want to try out Nyx, and do a flash tease
That way the reader does not have to type in page numbers

But doing a choice in a regular tease is not a 'bad' thing
Several teases have them, As I said, just a suggestion.

I also think you put to much text in the last pages
Did you run out of pictures?
I understand you want the person to stop
and then humilate them
but you could have used two more pages to do this.
Examples below:

"Ofcourse you should get into position for that... *giggles* "
Should be the start of Page 10

"So, here goes:"
would be page 11 and then you go to the next page.

Good idea, just need to strech out the stor a little and not put to much on one page.

It was supposed to be on more pages, but unfortunately I, as you said, ran out of pictures.
I will take your advice, thanks.

dorf23 wrote:It was supposed to be on more pages, but unfortunately I, as you said, ran out of pictures.
I will take your advice, thanks.

With care you can use pictures more than once,
try and keep the continuity though


les

I enjoyed it, so thanks for writing it.
I love it in the face

les wrote:

dorf23 wrote:It was supposed to be on more pages, but unfortunately I, as you said, ran out of pictures.
I will take your advice, thanks.

With care you can use pictures more than once,
try and keep the continuity though

Yes, for example in my tease Erica and Faye at Thanksgiving you can see I repeated some pictures several times. Often I use the same photo when a woman is undressing and then again when putting her clothes back on, especially if there are not many photos to choose from. But I agree one should be careful and not bore the reader.