Milovana.com

I've been around here for a little while and this just happens to be my first web tease. Let me know how I did? a little feedback on what was good and bad. Thanks and enjoy!

Link to the tease..
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=610

Great debut!

Lot's of story, which I like. You also clearly made a point in matching pics to the text. The whole definitely had style. All in all I think it's really a complete package.

Now, what can you improve next time? The pics were pretty amateurish, although that might been intentional as it also makes the tease very real. But then the second pics feels pretty out of place, maybe you can find a more consistent series of pics for your next work.

The other thing I want to mention is: The story is moving very fast in the beginning. You have very little text on the first few pics and tons of text per pic later on. You should make the next tease a little more balanced in that regard.

All in all, well done and I really look forward to seeing more from you in the future! You definitely brought some new to the table here, thanks!

Thanks for the helpful feedback. Yes I know picture 2 was out of place and the pictures were amateurish. That is because it was an ex of mine. Maybe next time I shall ask her to do a porno shoot to have the pictures flow better And a few of the pictures were doctored if you did not know But all in all I was going for the sense of realism, since I felt there was already many porn site webteasers already here. I spent a good 2 hours making that tease and was hoping to direct it at a certain audience.. so I may have gone too far at times. Next time I will build more suspense and mystery

Anyhow, thanks for the feedback.. next will be more balanced.

Owen wrote:That is because it was an ex of mine.

You know you can only publish pictures of people if the person in the picture consents? If you don't have consent I suggest you take down the tease ASAP and replace the pics. Otherwise you can easily find yourself being sued.

I've just talked about this with dark. I like the amateurish look, but I can't tolerate it if you publish people's faces against their will. Sorry.

Yes I like that amateur look, too. But I agree, if she don't know about it's not fair. Sorry dude, I liked that tease, but you could replace the pictures.

I hope you understand that.

edit: I looked at the pictures again, she posed with a dildo in front of you, nice Ex you had mate

Don't wanna get you in trouble. So I will take it down.

That was photoshop work man. But she did pose with a dildo in front of me before. The clothes were photoshop too. Its too bad I never got any pictures of the good moments

I mean in general amateur is ok but the person on the picture should always agree.

edit: Hehe ok you are more evil than I thought

Just kidding

Owen wrote:Don't wanna get you in trouble. So I will take it down.

Thanks.

And for everyone else: If you have consent - No thing, go ahead. But if you don't... do not take a chance. Simple, right?