I want more feedback like this!
I'm glad to hear your feedback on action words.
Do other people agree with Sunset on this one? I was afraid to overuse them, but I can only guess; I don't know where the right balance is without your feedback. My problem was that I didn't want to use *smiles* over and over again, but wanted random pics and was afraid to use actions that didn't fit random pics and break the spell. Darn, I wish I would have thought more about this at the time, because now that you mention it, I could have added *sways hips*, *bites lip*, *stretches & sighs*, *stares intensely*, *leers*... I could have done tons more! So.... great feedback, I got a new insight from this.
I agree on the random/repetitive thing. That's a drawback. If I had it to do over again, I could have changed the slides so they didn't unset themselves, then have put several "reshuffle" slides in there that were "invisible"... they'd just unset everything and then draw another slide. I had thought of it before but was already happy with the statistics on how long it took Chance to start counting and removing more and more slides from the deck changed that. I could have taken the time offset it, but I wanted to get the tease out the door. That said, sometimes Chance's friends are surprisingly gentle and caring, and then the next person tries the tease and somehow the random gods decide Chance's friends will be relentlessly and repetitively mean. I hadn't expected that, but I love it. Now that I'm done, I'm not sure I'd change it if I had to do it all over again because I'd fear that it could homogenize the tease (each run ends up with x% nice slides, y% cruel ones, etc) and that would hurt the tease's longevity.
The models' photos took longer to find than I thought. I needed a good tone, indoors, staring at you, preferably in the living room (though there are some bed pics I couldn't resist), great face, confident, not too explicit (almost nobody walks in plops down and sticks a toy up their ass in the first minute). I had no idea how many good models photos were outdoor photos! If I ever make another tease with lots of models and the same kind of tone, I'm going to try to get the story to be outside so I have a different selection of pics.
The timing thing was tough. I didn't take the time to customize the timing to the actual messages, they were all the same random range of seconds. I wanted to keep the shortest one frustratingly short in order to give a sense of urgency and chaos to it, but yes, some of the messages are longer than others.
Regarding the mix of models, I kept an eye out different ones but was constrained by needing pics that weren't so specific that some of the messages wouldn't work. For example, I explicitly tried to search for Asian pictures, but failed. I didn't find any Asian pics that were indoor where I liked the face, that weren't too explicit or submissive, where either a message of "gentle strokes" or "smack your balls" would work. Not to say they aren't out there, just that I couldn't find them before I gave up. The whole issue made me rethink race and porn. When I see a black or Asian person in real life, I don't think that a meek black woman or a patient demanding Asian woman is a paradox. At all. In porn, though, I somehow read that into the pics. I strongly suspect it's because it IS in the pics because those are models/pics that people are looking for when they are looking for black or Asian erotic photos. Self-selection. (i.e. I'm not inferring, the pic is implying.) However, this might be a "I'm not crazy,
you all are crazy." defense.
Thoughts, anyone?
Again, thanks much for your thoughtful feedback, Sunset!
If you can't stay that close without going over, then don't get THAT close. Of course, that means you might fail the challenge... but she not-so-secretly enjoys that. She doesn't want your ongoing obedience, she wants to see you struggle. I think giving up would be the 'out' she'd like the least.
..., and make it more exciting.
And you hung with it for an hour!!!!