FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
- galvanisedpenguin
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FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
Just published my first tease. Leave any feedback or suggestions for improvements in here.
- androgyme
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Re: FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
Looks promising. Unfortunately I don't have time to do it now, and won't for a while. Still, from what I read, I'm sure it'll be a fun tease. It's well written, the model is hot, and it looks to be full of humiliation (which is for me). Can't wait until I can complete it.
Re: FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
The only think I can say is WOW. Thank you very much for this tease.
Re: FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
OUTSTANDING!!!!
This has to be TOTM!
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Re: FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
incredible is just not a strong enough word!
loved your innovation, Congrats on a wonderful tease!
loved your innovation, Congrats on a wonderful tease!
Re: FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
Nice tease, but there is a typo near the end. Page 104 references Pages 104 and 105, should be 105 and 106.
- galvanisedpenguin
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Re: FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
Typo fixed.
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One of the best teases on the site, absolutely loved it!
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Re: FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
This was amazing. I loved the choices, the interaction, the writing, the content, the model--everything about it. I have to say this is now and all time favorite tease of mine.
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I don't know, to me there were some really good elements to the tease, but there were a couple of things I really didn't care for. Personally, I like a little more story to get things started. When I see 'Let’s get started. First, you need to pop that buttplug in your slutty ass.' I pretty much know that the tease isn't going to be among my favorites. It's not that a buttplug is a turnoff, it's just not something I'm gonna do on page 3 of a new tease. Similarly, instructions like "do X 100 times" don't do much for me, regardless of what X happens to be. You showed a lot of creativity overall, so hopefully in your future teases you can put a little more emphasis on the story behind the instructions.
Anyway, that's just my 2 cents. The ratings for your tease are great, so I may very well be in the minority on this...
Anyway, that's just my 2 cents. The ratings for your tease are great, so I may very well be in the minority on this...
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Re: FB: Miss Kimmy's Sissy Whore
Loved the tease. You should definitely do more.
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