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FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 11:59 am
by flpanther
Very nice job for those that like to edge!! There were no extended time periods, which I find sometimes boring. The tease moved right along. I think with more practise this writer will only get better. Bravo!!
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 3:53 pm
by aldorax
Excellent writing, great pictures, and great 'pace' of the tease. Very good job!
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 10:39 pm
by AtTheEdge
Great job! Good use of the timers. Excellent pacing.
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 10:41 pm
by littlepos
okay, where is this tease? i cannot find it
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 10:43 pm
by PuppyPuppet
It's on the front page - but here's a link direct.
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showflash.php?id=6178
Really good tease by the way. I was very impressed. Lots of edging, which is great - good pacing, sexy writing, a good, flowing story and great pictures.
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 10:45 pm
by littlepos
okay, i admit, i am overworked
i have no idea how i missed that on the front page, haha
thanks
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2009 3:24 am
by Makarov
If only my dorm experience was more like this...
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2009 5:38 pm
by jjsubslut
i think this tease would make a really good series tease, any one else agree?
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Fri Oct 02, 2009 4:48 pm
by camel
I totally agree regarding the pace. That was great! There's nothing like intensity and chaos to maintain my "suspension of disbelief".
It also avoided one of my pet peeves, which is when nothing is going on but the author "times" the page anyway rather than just providing a "continue" button.
Re: FB Dormitory Duties
Posted: Tue Jan 18, 2011 3:29 am
by PedroZorro
Excellent webtease. A+
Now is one of my favorite.