FB: Adri Molds Her Man
Posted: Sat Apr 25, 2009 4:15 pm
I have to say, I really liked this tease, and it's got a pretty high rating, so I'm sure I'm not the only one. For me, it's a combination of a great model and a playful tone that really make this tease work. The pictures always seem like they're telling the same story as the text.
Unfortunately, parts of the text are a little sloppy. It looks as though nobody went through and proofread it. It's a pity, too, because for a solid tease like this, it would be really easy for me to get into it, but when I have to decipher spelling errors, the fantasy is lost.
Loveduck, this is a great first attempt, and I hope you keep writing. But do yourself a favor and proofread (or ask for proofreading help) before you publish. If you do, I'd expect your ratings to soar beyond the already solid 4.1 that you have for this tease. Keep up the good work.
~Jace
Unfortunately, parts of the text are a little sloppy. It looks as though nobody went through and proofread it. It's a pity, too, because for a solid tease like this, it would be really easy for me to get into it, but when I have to decipher spelling errors, the fantasy is lost.
Loveduck, this is a great first attempt, and I hope you keep writing. But do yourself a favor and proofread (or ask for proofreading help) before you publish. If you do, I'd expect your ratings to soar beyond the already solid 4.1 that you have for this tease. Keep up the good work.
~Jace