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my own webteases
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 12:09 am
by reflog1
I was just curious if anybody enjoyed my webteases. i want to do a flash but i cant seem to figure it out
Re: my own webteases
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 12:41 am
by Jord
I like them - the humiliation is nice, and Kate is very stimulating to look at. But the grammar needs some work - it's distracting to have no capital letters or punctuation, at least for me.
Being new at all this, I don't know if my opinion really counts, but I think you've got potential - your work just needs some refinement.
Jord
Re: my own webteases
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 4:36 am
by reflog1
trust me your opinion does matter. nice work on the new tease. i really like series.
Re: my own webteases
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 5:48 am
by punkrngd
its a great series... i have always loved all the models, especially kate. the flow works out well too, you really get a feel for being inside the tease. I always love them!
Re: my own webteases
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 6:21 am
by all2true
reflog1 wrote:I was just curious if anybody enjoyed my webteases. i want to do a flash but i cant seem to figure it out
I would be willing to help, if I can, with what problems your having with FLASH.
What exactly 'can't you figure out'?
Re: my own webteases
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 2:04 pm
by srb
reflog1 wrote:I was just curious if anybody enjoyed my webteases. i want to do a flash but i cant seem to figure it out
My only two things are this. First is the grammar, which needs a bit of tweaking. BUt second is that the character of CHarlie...isn't me. So it's harder for me to get myself into the fantasy. I feel like I'm a second person watching Charlie and whomever the girl at the time is, then it jumps back to me in the middle of the tease.
BUt that's just my opinion. Apologies if you didn't want to hear it.