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RE: All and everything.
Posted: Thu Nov 13, 2008 11:51 pm
by liljake
Good tease. I especially like teases with Kate...she is soooo hot! Try to keep continuity in the text if you can. The guy went from being BOB to CHARLIE with no warning.
I thought I had jumped teases or something.
Re: RE: All and everything.
Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 4:33 am
by all2true
The Tease is:
Fantasy Revealed:
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=3417
The hey bob comment is made to kinda to himself
so... perhaps he is talking to his penis?
Bob is not all that an uncommon name for one's penis?
or perhaps it's Charlie? (his Penis' name)
Joking a bit there- Sorry Reflog
Other continuity issues - is clothing appears on her after you see her brests (although I do that one all the time- the dressed after seeing them naked difficulty- easy to do in a long tease)
The title (Not apart of the series) and yet the 'tease' starts a series?
All that aside I did love the photoes
and think there is potential for a sequal
Perhaps in the next installment things will become clearer?