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[Feedback] Thanks for the help!
Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2021 2:09 pm
by FemboyBirdie
Hello! I'm Birdie and would love some feedback on my teases
So far no one has complained and some have even given me tips when I posted my older teases, some are inspirations like Morexis! I've gotten a lot of support and would love get some feedback and find out what I should make next. Should continue the "Cum Fast or Ruin!" Series or do something else? I don't think I will be able to do something as big as what Morexis does, taking months to do one tease, keeping my teases short and simple I think is best. If I do end up doing something big then Idk what It will be. Anyway back to the topic, I want to continue making teases and feedback on my current ones would help with me making them better! It would be greatly appreciated!
Cum Fast or Ruin! (Blacked Edition):
https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=51990
Cum Fast or Ruin! (Goon Edition!):
https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=51018
Cum Fast or Ruin! (Censored Version) UPDATED!:
https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=50948
Smelly and Sweaty:
https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=47195
-Birdie
Re: [Feedback] Thanks for the help!
Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2021 5:46 pm
by RandomName
Hey there.
I feel to start I should make it apparent that I am not your target demographic, these aren't really things I have much interest in, but as you seemed to request feedback, I thought that maybe I could try and help from a more objective angle.
So, my information is based on the censored one, as that's the only one I've seen (see above). But from what I can tell, they lack replayability. This isn't always a problem, but to my knowledge, isn't the point of premature ejaculation stuff like this supposed to ask that you cum faster and faster?
From what I remember the writing seemed fine.
Your image choice was good, exactly what it said it would be.
This is really all I have to say while trying to look at it objectively. I mean, as we both know, they're short. So there isn't much to critique.
I think I could point out some more problems I have, but as those are more about taste and preference, since I already said I'm not your target, I don't really see the point.
Ultimately I think your teases are fine. If I had to venture a guess as to their rating being a bit low it would come down to replayability and complexity. If you have such a short tease, I think you really want to hit at least one of those.
I apologize if I came off as harsh, glad to hear you've had others praise your work though!
Re: [Feedback] Thanks for the help!
Posted: Sun Nov 07, 2021 4:36 am
by FemboyBirdie
RandomName wrote: Sat Nov 06, 2021 5:46 pm
Hey there.
I feel to start I should make it apparent that I am not your target demographic, these aren't really things I have much interest in, but as you seemed to request feedback, I thought that maybe I could try and help from a more objective angle.
So, my information is based on the censored one, as that's the only one I've seen (see above). But from what I can tell, they lack replayability. This isn't always a problem, but to my knowledge, isn't the point of premature ejaculation stuff like this supposed to ask that you cum faster and faster?
From what I remember the writing seemed fine.
Your image choice was good, exactly what it said it would be.
This is really all I have to say while trying to look at it objectively. I mean, as we both know, they're short. So there isn't much to critique.
I think I could point out some more problems I have, but as those are more about taste and preference, since I already said I'm not your target, I don't really see the point.
Ultimately I think your teases are fine. If I had to venture a guess as to their rating being a bit low it would come down to replayability and complexity. If you have such a short tease, I think you really want to hit at least one of those.
I apologize if I came off as harsh, glad to hear you've had others praise your work though!
Oh no problem lol, I realize that my teases don't necessarily have replayibility, I think the reason why I didn't use random images was more because the message itself is typically somewhat connected to the image reinforcing what's on the image itself. Maybe I'll experiment with using random images and stuff, maybe make a V2 of one of those to just kinda test it out. I also don't want to just stick to PE stuff, I wanted to make things that only a small audience here would most likely like. Especially since I've never really seen PE on here?
I think the one I did the worst on in terms of writing was the Blacked Edition, I'm not into blacked a whole lot other than the humiliation factor. So It's a little hard for me to write that to my best abilities...
-Birdie