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As I am somtimes a little disappointed with the "random factor" of the outcome of a tease, I expanded the system a little bit, by using a dice and direct page jumping. Did you try it? Is it to complicated? Did I work?

As I am not a native english speaker, please do not blame my wording or grammar, I tried my best.

Any suggestions or comments to the tease and the page jumping are welcome.

Thanks
Roy

I thought it was absolutely brilliant from my point of view. I was skim reading it and i didnt notice too many spelling and/or grammar errors. I quickly tried the page skipping thing, it worked fine on my computer. I just think that is the most brilliant thing someone has brought into a tease since submm1 introduced me in particular to icy hot.

I loved the innovative ideas of ball torture. The tying a bottle to your balls and then having them do jumping jacks made me giggle.

Loved it, you made my tease look like crap. Definately tease of the month - November, maybe even tease of the year.

Absolutely amazing, well done and welcome to the forums.

I have to agree that the page jumping technique is rather brilliant. I use it when I am editing my teases, but it never occurred to me to include it as part of the tease.

Having said that, I only have one small concern. I can see this being abused by overuse. I'm not saying don't use it. I will almost certainly construct a tease using this technique. But, too much of a good thing can render it rather commonplace.

Please don't take my last as a criticism of your tease; it is not. Excellent tease and brilliant innovation!

I offer a very envious salute!

Only issue that I had is that I was lucky enough not to get a single 5 or 6 during the torture segment. Then when I had to roll to see if I got to cum, there wasn't any option for those of us who got zero 5/6's.

@ salerio: You are right. My mistake. I really missed it. My only apologize is that i was quite tired when i finished it. It was 04:00 in the morning...
Next Time i try harder

@ slavechylde: I agree to you. I tried not to overdo it with the jumping. And this is certainly not something for every tease. But what I liked is the greater amount of opportunites it gives to a writer.
Tanks for your hints. And if there is fair and constructive criticism, wonderful, be my guest.

@ Mz_Teneale: So far I enjoyed your teases really. Even if I am not so tough concerning my painlevel. Glad to hear that you liked my tease. It is always nice to get positive reviews from gifted teaseauthors like you are.
Lets wait what my next tease will be. Maybe it was a "one hit wonder"

Nice idea der_roysan. The ratings are awesome. I think the style of pagejumping will used by other authors in the future, because we already got some inquires for a multiple choice feature.

@Salerio: Fixed the missing zero option and changed two pages to adjust the chances of a release. Thanks for your help

@dark Yes, I think other authors will use this too. One of my first questions here was for a multiple choice option. I would refer to my idea as a work around. I am sure if more people will use this seraph0x will expand the Editor.

http://milovana.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=30

By the way the idea is not new It's just a question of implementing this in a good easy way for all users.

great job Roysan!!

I loved the page-jumping element, the length and variation in your webtease!

It's possibly my favourite tease!!

Thanks loads!

i tried a tease like this the other day but didn't find it to be that good, i'd rather wait and see if a better way of creating this sort of tease comes out

I absolutely loved the page jumping! The tease itself doesn't always appeal to my tastes, and yet I keep coming back to it due to the page jumps. When I start writing teases, it's something I'm definitely going to include Thanks so much!

I rated the tease 4, because i liked the pagejumping. But i missed some story and it was a bit too short. Perhaps i expected too much because of this amazing rating. But although this little critism a wonderful tease. Thank you

Just done "a Painful Experience" tease and all I gotta say is WOW, BRILLIANT, AMAZING ... Well not all, I have more to say ... the page jumping and randomisation just blew my mind ... and (luckily) I got to blow something else, but (even luckier) I got to ruin it ...
Thanks a million Roysan, you're the man!

To all who like my tease and the ones who didn't like it so much.
I think the positve reviews are basically owed to the fact that I tried to get round the limitation of writing a linear tease. I am quite sure there will be other and certainly better teases than mine if other and maybe more talented people will use this way of creating teases.


@ cdsub: thanks for your positve review. I will certainly do another tease in the next weeks.

@ dark: As I explained in the beginning I think the raiting is because of the fact that I tried something new. I agree to you that there could be more story. But on the other hand, personally I am not a big fan of reading very long stories. but when I write another tease I try to do this part better. promised

@ uberbear01: Thanks! Glad to hear that you liked it