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My first in a while. Any thoughts, comments, criticisms?

Great narrative. It's one of those that I'd only ever fantasize about, but what a turn-on!

The style is consistent throughout, and has a nice flow to it. You've managed to capture a real sense of personality for the mistress in the tease. She comes across as though she's genuinely talking to the reader. Something that very, very, few teases do well (with a few notable exceptions--I was always a huge fan of Miss Tira's teases because of her ability to convey personality in writing--ah, but I digress).

Overall, this was a refreshing new scenario, and if all of your writing is that solid you should definitely try your hand at more teases.

In fact, taking a look at your other work, I'm not sure why I didn't ever get into the Coed Cockteasers series. The writing there seems solid as well, but maybe the initial setup was too far-fetched for me at the time. Anyway, great job, and keep writing!

Amazingly well done, A+, will be following your future writing

This is easily one of the two or three single best teases I've enjoyed. You write so well - I couldn't be in greater agreement with joeliwan (above). Terrific.

Sub-Routine wrote:My first in a while. Any thoughts, comments, criticisms?

Fantastic work!

i must also congratulate your writing skills, although this is not the type of tease i usually like, it is a joy to peruse, and cough cough cough !!

It's hard to post a comment after joeliwan described so well the qualities of you tease.

I 'd just like to ad that perhaps what makes it different is also that it somehow really gave me the creeps. Fear mixed with pleasure is a really big incentive I guess...

Keep up the good work, I'll check your earlier work.

By the way, I voted for you for TOTM, I hope you'll get it!!!