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Shattered wrote: ↑Sun Mar 25, 2018 1:36 pm No Metronome, as per request :)

Bummer...I really enjoy a metronome where applicable.
Thanks anyway for a great tease!

Yeah why did someone request No Metronome? The tab can always be muted if someone doesn't want sounds.

Shattered wrote: ↑Sun Mar 25, 2018 6:40 pm

MateoTut wrote: ↑Sun Mar 25, 2018 5:08 pm Nice Tease... loved it :)
A couple issues
I'm using Chrome as my web browser
1. Can't enter a code because there is no zero
2. "25" (Pass 3) tease is not working... it seems to be stuck in a loop that never ends - (Mistress Jennifer) 3rd set of girls after the intro

1. That code isnt for this tease, don't worry :)
2. Could you add a little extra detail as to where the loop is? I had a quick pass through it and couldnt find it.

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Location of issue -- This is with 25 and Missy. When you hit slide that says
"And... briefly let it fade away.
Just a very short break"...
Press "Edging"
This will bring you back to the beginning of your encounter with Missy

I see the error of my ways... lol
I needed to let the timer expire instead of hitting "Edging"
Sorry for the false alarm

Woo, 4.6 after two days and highest rated flash tease. I expect it'll fall as it always does but it's nice to see :)

mondany wrote: ↑Mon Mar 26, 2018 12:14 am bug:

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The Slow and Fast buttons on 25 path with Seven & Xia are reversed

Fixed
spelling mistakes:

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"Chirish the last minute we spend together" -> Cherish

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"And you're failures have made me intervene" -> And your failures

Fixed
Love how clever the story is, and all the extra content, and the appropriate breaking of the fourth wall. In addition to how hot the tease was. No rush but eagerly awaiting part 2

Glad you enjoyed it, thanks for the fixes :)

mondany wrote: ↑Mon Mar 26, 2018 10:53 am Yeah why did someone request No Metronome? The tab can always be muted if someone doesn't want sounds.

It fundamentally changes the way I write the tease. If I say stroke to the beat and you turn it off, theres a dissonance there. If theres no metronome you instead get instructed on how to stroke. I prefer to use both depending on what fits with a leaning toward instruction, but muting isn't really a solution for how I'd write it anyway. It's also quite a bit of work to add metronome to every slide so if it isnt requested its a bit of a waste :)

MateoTut wrote: ↑Mon Mar 26, 2018 11:16 am

Shattered wrote: ↑Sun Mar 25, 2018 6:40 pm

MateoTut wrote: ↑Sun Mar 25, 2018 5:08 pm Nice Tease... loved it :)
A couple issues
I'm using Chrome as my web browser
1. Can't enter a code because there is no zero
2. "25" (Pass 3) tease is not working... it seems to be stuck in a loop that never ends - (Mistress Jennifer) 3rd set of girls after the intro

1. That code isnt for this tease, don't worry :)
2. Could you add a little extra detail as to where the loop is? I had a quick pass through it and couldnt find it.

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Location of issue -- This is with 25 and Missy. When you hit slide that says
"And... briefly let it fade away.
Just a very short break"...
Press "Edging"
This will bring you back to the beginning of your encounter with Missy

I see the error of my ways... lol
I needed to let the timer expire instead of hitting "Edging"
Sorry for the false alarm

Ah I see, I forgot to remove a useless button, its gone now, thanks :) Not a false alarm at all, it doesn't break the tease but it's certainly inconvenient :)

This tease looks really good!
I've tried it quickly and I can't wait to have time to do it properly.
Anyway, there is so much "edge" for me... A real slut haven't to touch her dick, so I can't understand why all these edge and wank.
Anyway, great job!

allccc wrote: ↑Mon Mar 26, 2018 2:54 pm This tease looks really good!
I've tried it quickly and I can't wait to have time to do it properly.
Anyway, there is so much "edge" for me... A real slut haven't to touch her dick, so I can't understand why all these edge and wank.
Anyway, great job!

This is just level one ;)

Amazing tease !
as usual with you, Shattered

I still have to do the last try, but i need some rest for today

I hope to see level 2 anyway.

And as the plain doll said :
"Over time, countless hunters have visited this dream. The graves here stand in their memory. It all seems so long ago now..."
I loved the reference

Even with a metronome you could still say, "One stroke every two seconds!" for example.

Looking forward to the next part either way.

Thanks!

Once again an amazing story and concept. You surprise me everytime with twists and great stories to follow along.

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found some (?) secrets and like the idea!!!

Looking very much forward to see a next level.

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possible crossover?

Braska wrote: ↑Mon Mar 26, 2018 8:50 pm Amazing tease !
as usual with you, Shattered

I still have to do the last try, but i need some rest for today

I hope to see level 2 anyway.

And as the plain doll said :
"Over time, countless hunters have visited this dream. The graves here stand in their memory. It all seems so long ago now..."
I loved the reference

We will see about it :) I'd like to make it, but working full time now leaves me with barely any time to write so it's harder to justify just for the fun of it now So when I get patrons I feel better about it. XD

And...

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I've never played bloodbourne, where did I make an accidental reference?

slavejack wrote: ↑Mon Mar 26, 2018 9:43 pm Even with a metronome you could still say, "One stroke every two seconds!" for example.

Looking forward to the next part either way.

Thanks!

I could, but it's shoehorned - I wouldn't have a metronome as a random beeping,I like immersion and that requires it to be integrated into the world, so it'd only fit into a dimensions style tease like that :) Like if a character said "stroke to the metronome? Oh, um, thats two per second. But I don't need to tell you that unless you're deaf? And then...you wouldn't hear it anyway..." Can't do that every slide y'know, it'd feel a bit silly :) But I appreciate the feedback nonetheless for sure even if it wouldn't work for me

mr-max wrote: ↑Tue Mar 27, 2018 5:46 pm Once again an amazing story and concept. You surprise me everytime with twists and great stories to follow along.

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found some (?) secrets and like the idea!!!

Looking very much forward to see a next level.

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possible crossover?

Oh? I kinda consider

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24 and 25

a secret since they are easy to miss and optional, if that's what you mean, but wasn't anything suuuper out of the way this time around, right? Although I did consider leaving the note at the end of 25 out...

And that'd be...interesting ;) Already got a tiny bit of it


Thank you all for your kind words :) Still 4.6!

Shattered wrote: ↑Tue Mar 27, 2018 8:12 pm
And...

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I've never played bloodbourne, where did I make an accidental reference?

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Never played it ? Really ? thats funny :

For me, the whole tease works like a "Soul" game (Demon Soul/Dark Soul/Bloodborne) : A "no name" main character, lost in a strange universe, kind of a nightmare, and not knowing who he is, where he is, nor what is really expected from him. These games like your tease work with a permanent "die and retry" mechanic, with the player desperatly trying to pass a level or to go a little further in a level, before to die another time and come back at the hub of the game where a mysterious woman (a doll in BB, a maiden in the other Souls) vaguely guide him.

Also I really thought BB could also mean BloodBorne ...

Anyway, I finished the last part, and it was great again.

Thanks for this amazing tease

Braska wrote: ↑Wed Mar 28, 2018 6:43 pm

Shattered wrote: ↑Tue Mar 27, 2018 8:12 pm
And...

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I've never played bloodbourne, where did I make an accidental reference?

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Never played it ? Really ? thats funny :

For me, the whole tease works like a "Soul" game (Demon Soul/Dark Soul/Bloodborne) : A "no name" main character, lost in a strange universe, kind of a nightmare, and not knowing who he is, where he is, nor what is really expected from him. These games like your tease work with a permanent "die and retry" mechanic, with the player desperatly trying to pass a level or to go a little further in a level, before to die another time and come back at the hub of the game where a mysterious woman (a doll in BB, a maiden in the other Souls) vaguely guide him.

Also I really thought BB could also mean BloodBorne ...

Anyway, I finished the last part, and it was great again.

Thanks for this amazing tease

Ah yes, I see what you mean. Well, I am a big gamer and try to put in a hint or two here and there, so I guess im bound to make accidental references as well :) But yeah I'm familiar with these types of games and suppose maybe my subconscious is as well XD. Although in this case I came up with conversion first then

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thought hey it'd be cool if you could actually see the different versions of yourself.

And BB is just the initials of the model in this case, but that is a reasonable deduction. I like it
Thanks for the feedback, always good to hear!

Also nearly 45k views in 4 days is pretty hype. Already higher than two of my other teases TOTAL views (Which I both love and hate at the same time )

Thanks everyone who has played it

Excellent tease. Perfect pacing, challenging but not overpowering or totally impossible, and perfect English. Definitely had a realistic feel to the thing, which few teases generate -- at least to me.

WELL DONE!

Very well done! I enjoyed the writing, style, pace, and variety of tasks. Hope to see a part 2 soon. And I'm sure this took a lot of time and effort to create, but know people appreciate it and your hard work doesn't go unnoticed!

I wanted to at least document that going forward I've changed the tease 'conversion therapy' into 'transformation therapy'. When I made this tease I wasn't aware of the real horrific process that conversion therapy actually exists. I discovered a while after but it somehow slipped my mind to amend it. After being reminded today, I've changed the name.