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Just a normal family

Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2017 10:25 pm
by Longplay1
Please let me know how you liked my tease. It was my first one so i would like to know everything you think about it.

Re: Just a normal family

Posted: Sun Dec 31, 2017 5:13 am
by FATALES
I'm glad you wrote so good a tease that has a story.
Good idea with different choice.
Almost no one here these not write. It's rare in teases sex or cum.
I recommend my similar tease: GLADIATOR - be careful there is more exercise there
https://milovana.com/webteases/showflash.php?id=35828

OR Adventurous Wife ACT2 - The degree of desire

I have only 4 points - maybe more edge , cumming only at the end or only 2x , little femdom ( it does not have to be painful )
stroking or sex you have to earn as a reward but that's just my opinion.
Certainly continue writing - I will rejoice.

Re: Just a normal family

Posted: Sun Dec 31, 2017 11:05 am
by Longplay1
FATALES wrote: Sun Dec 31, 2017 5:13 am I'm glad you wrote so good a tease that has a story.
Good idea with different choice.
Almost no one here these not write. It's rare in teases sex or cum.
I recommend my similar tease: GLADIATOR - be careful there is more exercise there
https://milovana.com/webteases/showflash.php?id=35828

OR Adventurous Wife ACT2 - The degree of desire

I have only 4 points - maybe more edge , cumming only at the end or only 2x , little femdom ( it does not have to be painful )
stroking or sex you have to earn as a reward but that's just my opinion.
Certainly continue writing - I will rejoice.
Thank you for your comment. I have already tried these two you reccomended :)

Re: Just a normal family

Posted: Sun Dec 31, 2017 7:03 pm
by DancingWithMadness
That was interesting, thanks for all the work.

Some feedback, you might have someone proofread it before you release it in the future. There were a few spelling and grammatical issues.

Again, it was great, thanks!