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Hello !

Here can you give me Tips and criticism.

I am German and my english is not the best. I make a short tease for test.

Now feel free to answer !

For the love of god, have someone proofread your next one. Or at least use spellcheck. I respect your attempt but with all the technology in the world and the vast community of helpful and creative individuals on this site alone, there is no excuse for so many spelling and grammatical errors.

I prefer someone making the effort than those publishing teases in languages that most of the community don't speak and can't understand. Yes there are many errors, but at least it's understandable and he will improve now he knows the community can help

Bonsai50, I enjoyed your tease. Except the spell/grammatical mistakes (I make some too) I would just suggest you to not use long timers (that's a personnal preference, maybe others have different opinion) ; I prefer having 3 x 30 seconds than 1.30 min, it gives the feeling things are still moving on, even if it don't really change anything. But I know it can be more difficult to find enough text to add and images without being repetitive.

Komme auch aus Deutschland und könnte dir ggf. helfen wenn du willst das zu übersetzen.

@ paswis

Danke werde ich gerne annehmen die Hilfe !

Aber erst mal wieder auf einen guten tease kommen.

Kannst dich ja melden :)

paswis wrote: Thu Mar 02, 2017 9:45 pmKomme auch aus Deutschland und könnte dir ggf. helfen wenn du willst das zu übersetzen.

paswis wrote: Thu Mar 02, 2017 9:45 pm Kannst dich ja melden :)

This is what I was talking about. There are helpful people all over this site, now that Bonsai50 has some help I'm sure we'll be seeing things that make people (Lestat) say "Are you happy now, Tury. You asshole." real soon, and 'm looking forward to it.

Wunderbar!

@Tury
I don't get how does that link with what I said, but due to the PM you sent me (I think you should have posted it here) I'm not going to debate.

Ok.

Thought I'd best go look at your work. I can tell you're not a native speaker from the first page: "For this you have 90 sec" just isn't the right syntax. Depending on how much English you want to learn (obviously none is perfectly acceptable), I'd suggest reading more so you understand how the words can be adapted - that' s obviously a long-term goal.

If you don't know how to spell properly, a spell checker won't help you nor will it if you don't know the words as they should be used so it might help a bit, but not a lot. It will help with typos of course e.g. 'storking' rather than 'stroking', etc. Maybe just a proof-read could have corrected a number of these (?).

Spelling things like 'ready' as 'reddy', however, suggests you're actually British because they can't spell either nowadays - again, reading will correct this whereas the spoken word won't.

As for the tease itself, which is the important bit, well ... it's ok; some will like it more than others but it's not at the level of a tease by e.g. 1885 but I wouldn't expect it to be unless you actually can write a tease like that already in German. If you can, it might be better to do that and have someone translate it for you.

As Lestat has mentioned it, I'll point out the chances of my reading a PM are nil (just in case, but I suspect it's not required).


Welcome onboard and enjoy posting your teases.

@lestat
In case you didn't already figure it out, this is me.

Kann ich den Tease bearbeiten ?wenn ja wie ??? möchte was ändern

Can I edit the tease ? if so how do I do that ??? want to change something