Re: 3 hours of hell
Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 8:18 pm
That was good... waiting for the next try....
My only suggestion is to take your time when writing and pay more attention to detail. This felt a little bit rushed.
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Re: 3 hours of hell
Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 3:25 pm
Delightful! Maybe the stakes should be raised next time, and he becomes her slave if he loses.
My only suggestion is to take your time when writing and pay more attention to detail. This felt a little bit rushed.
My only suggestion is to take your time when writing and pay more attention to detail. This felt a little bit rushed.
Re: 3 hours of hell
Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:17 pm
i thought it was brilliant. although it does remind me that I'm probably never going to find a woman as wonderful as this.