FB: Ruin Contract by baconman888
Posted: Tue Nov 18, 2014 8:22 pm
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showf ... p?id=27908
This tease is a hidden gem. It deserves a feedback thread.
It is a "contract" tease, meant to be revisited and replayed over the course of several days (or weeks, if you prefer). The concept probably isn't 100% original, but it is still a refreshing change of pace from the usual one-and-done tease formula, and it is the one of the best-executed "come-back-when-you're-ready-for-more" type of teases I've seen on the site. I'll be honest... usually when a tease ends with "try again tomorrow," (etc) I don't. Been there -- done that -- don't have a strong desire to do it all again. But Ruin Contract is good, interesting, and varied enough to actually bring me back 2 or 3 times.
My only constructive criticism would be that it's probably not varied enough for me to revisit more than 3 times -- but that's asking a lot from a tease, and it doesn't detract from the fact that those first 3 visits were a lot of fun. I've started writing (and failed to finish) several truly replayable teases, with heavy use of randomness, and, to make it work, you basically have to write 10-15+ teases worth of content into a single tease. That's asking a lot from an author (just ask Venus, author of Maze of Passion!). So the fact that baconman's Ruin Contract is replayable even 3 times is praiseworthy.
Baconman, I hope you make more teases like this, perhaps with some randomness to make the tasks more varied and unpredictable. Thanks for your hard work! 5*
-lmind
This tease is a hidden gem. It deserves a feedback thread.
It is a "contract" tease, meant to be revisited and replayed over the course of several days (or weeks, if you prefer). The concept probably isn't 100% original, but it is still a refreshing change of pace from the usual one-and-done tease formula, and it is the one of the best-executed "come-back-when-you're-ready-for-more" type of teases I've seen on the site. I'll be honest... usually when a tease ends with "try again tomorrow," (etc) I don't. Been there -- done that -- don't have a strong desire to do it all again. But Ruin Contract is good, interesting, and varied enough to actually bring me back 2 or 3 times.
My only constructive criticism would be that it's probably not varied enough for me to revisit more than 3 times -- but that's asking a lot from a tease, and it doesn't detract from the fact that those first 3 visits were a lot of fun. I've started writing (and failed to finish) several truly replayable teases, with heavy use of randomness, and, to make it work, you basically have to write 10-15+ teases worth of content into a single tease. That's asking a lot from an author (just ask Venus, author of Maze of Passion!). So the fact that baconman's Ruin Contract is replayable even 3 times is praiseworthy.
Baconman, I hope you make more teases like this, perhaps with some randomness to make the tasks more varied and unpredictable. Thanks for your hard work! 5*
-lmind