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First post and first tease!

I skipped though the tease and as far as I can tell it's very well written and good choice of pictures. Especially the end is wicked. Well done!

I hope you stick around and write more teases!

Thank you, Venus. I had one tease previously, but I had to delete the gmail account I was redirecting to and neglected to save my password. You may find it under Emmaline if you are curious. It's... kinder.

I usually don't bother logging in to post feedback but really really good. I'm a big fan of using consistent image sets and the writing was well done. I admit I didn't follow all the instructions either, but I stopped at page 14 and will seriously consider actually restarting and trying to be obedient, which is rare for me.

Oh, that's perfectly alright! I certainly don't expect most people who read the tease to follow it to the letter, especially without reading it first. While there is some joy in the unexpected, an anonymous internet voice telling you what to do makes for a poorly negotiated scene. The ability to read ahead and define your own participation is extremely helpful. My commendations to those who do their best to follow along, that requires some fortitude and the days but half finished!

I thought it was excellent. Well written, a great 'voice', a sense of fun, and it looked like care had been taken. Thanks. I hope you write more.

Ah, thank you, Mccoy! Already working on part two
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Glad to hear that. :)

Glad to hear it! The second part is up, if there are any egregious errors please do let me know.

Loved your tease Miss EmmalineMadly. The write for me tasks became very frustrating for me. I would get into a rhythm and then miss a key, BAM, I was sent back. Love it.
Looking forward to any more in this series.

Thank you! I know there's at least one more part left in the day, not sure whether there will be two or if I will continue along this particular vein. I'm glad the task was manageable, my thanks to those who got eager and started on them early while I was still deciding whether to put them in. Writeforme's statistic tracking gave me a much better idea of what kind of time it would take / how difficult it would be.

Hey emmaline :)

Loved the line writing via write for me .org, I hope you'll do more with it in the future. I'd like it to be necessary to complete the assignment to go further, that would be nice. It's a real challenge this way.

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Oh, like a flash tease with a code or something? I could do that, but then it couldn't just be read as a sexy story! Besides, I'd find it hard to believe a good little pet would risk his owners wroth by not completing all the tasks set before him. You do want to earn those checkmarks, don't you?

Good teases. I find them so much more appealing with correct spelling, punctuation and grammar. And I like that the pictures were of an attractive girl, were appropriate, and all were from one set.

EmmalineMadly wrote:Oh, like a flash tease with a code or something? I could do that, but then it couldn't just be read as a sexy story! Besides, I'd find it hard to believe a good little pet would risk his owners wroth by not completing all the tasks set before him. You do want to earn those checkmarks, don't you?

Yes exactly. You could give it the necessary codes in this thread or something, for people that just like to read it as a story.