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Hi everyone,

I recently posted the Sticky Mess tease, and I was wondering if I should have shortened each page, and lengthened the tease? What does everyone think? Creative criticism readily accepted!

Thanks,

Kes

kesbabev wrote:Hi everyone,

I recently posted the Sticky Mess tease, and I was wondering if I should have shortened each page, and lengthened the tease? What does everyone think? Creative criticism readily accepted!

Thanks,

Kes

Well - It look like you have tried to convert a very sexy teasing text into a webtease...
In other words: yes, the text on each page is too long, but it would help, if you would just make some line-breaks on each page...

Reading 2 lines + 3 lines + 2 lines + 3 lines isnt as hard as reading a big 10 line block of text... - And 10 lines is a lot of text, even when it is split up.

But I have too say that your writing is good - Keep it up and add more and shorter pages!

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ts

ts,
Thanks for the help. I will most likely bring this tease down, and edit it into smaller parts, with more pics. Thanks again, and I invite any and all criticism to my work.

Kes