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A Christmas Cumslut
Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2013 3:06 am
by getiton
Sorry if anyone comes across any spelling or grammar errors, I wanted it out before Christmas. The tease in itself is quite wordy because it's in part a story but one with tasks to complete. Any feedback would be appreciated for future teases.
Re: A Christmas Cumslut
Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2013 7:11 am
by Salerio
I approve. The numerical feedback you get will probably be on the low side because of some of the, uh, story elements in the middle, but it's definitely one of the better ones published recently. I thought the ending scene was a little rushed, though.
Re: A Christmas Cumslut
Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2013 1:14 pm
by getiton
Salerio wrote:I approve. The numerical feedback you get will probably be on the low side because of some of the, uh, story elements in the middle, but it's definitely one of the better ones published recently. I thought the ending scene was a little rushed, though.
Yeh I'l admit I did rush it because of how close Christmas was getting, if I do a special tease in future I know to start to earlier.
Re: A Christmas Cumslut
Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2013 6:02 am
by Quiet Linda
Jana's little girl gave it 5 stars.
Sexy take on a classic story.
Hugs
Linda