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Feedback for Caught in Self-Bondage
Posted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 3:57 am
by submatt
This certainly is a fantasy of mine.
Posted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 4:07 am
by Marke
Wow - that was a lovely tease, great use of pictures and lovely dialogue.
The blackscreen confused me a bit - but yes, blindfold! Excellent.
This is a great example of a story tease in the first person. All you have to do is sit, struggle and click and let your imagination work overtime.
Love your work!
Posted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 4:55 am
by LNS
Very nice, I as well took a while to figure out the first screen, I knew it wasn't a mistake or you wouldn't have posted it.
You did a great job with that set of photos, quite a beauty.
LNS
Posted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 12:17 pm
by Tabby
A good job with the photos and text. However, it was a bit hard for me to feel really "in" the role described in the tease. I mean, I wouldn't really go put myself in self-bondage at the office, even if I could lock the door.
Posted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 8:09 pm
by Marke
The challenge of being in the role.
Some people treat web teases as just an illustrated story.
Some people take it as role play - imagining being in the scene.
Some web teases require full on interactivity (and they are fun but the hardest to write).
I love Submatt's work.
Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 4:47 am
by str0be
I liked it a lot.
This could be perfect for the Flash Tease format. Tie yourself up and then you don't even have to try to change the pages, just pay attention and suffer.
-str0be-
hmmm
Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 4:56 am
by submatt
Good point. I may have to do that.
Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 7:26 am
by Quazwierdcev283
While I know that submatt is an authority on teases I'm gonna have to offer some (hopefully) constructive criticism. I had no idea who it was that walked in on me, until you actually mentioned it toward the end. Maybe you could mention it on the second page instead next time.
confusion
Posted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 7:46 am
by submatt
Yeah, I guess there was a little confusion on this one. Some people didn't realize the black screen was a blindfold, and you didn't know who walked in.
But, see, I knew, and that's all that really matters.
Nah, just kidding. Thanks for the feedback.