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I've finally made a new tease, I hope the Milovana populous thinks it is as good as my previous ones (that have been deleted).

Here's the link: http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showt ... p?id=20321

I would really like some feedback and compliments and stuff. ^ ^; Tell me what you think.

That was a nice surprise to see on the Webteases page! Thanks for writing again - I loved it.

And I thought it was one of the good ones, at that. Great 'voice' to the writing, a lighthearted tone as before although a bit less so here because some of that humiliation got to me! And the twist at the end was clever - I like it when the webtease has a surprise and you don't know what's going to happen. And I also love when there is a sense of real challenge and you can make a game of it, which you always have.

Nice one.

Was definitely a great surprise to spot this tease. Glad you decided to make a comeback after what happened.

I thought it was great. Definitely up to previous quality, which was of course outstanding.

Props to a job well done :).

This comment is just for the admins to take into consideration.

Unlike youaswell's other teases, which were undoubtedly underage (Miku - 16, Ika Musume - Not sure, but visually young etc), GUMI in my opinion is well endowed, and mature. I have not seen an official character profile stating an age, however people appear to be making up ages based on upon the other characters of this genre.

I can also confirm that any tease that include the Vocaloids; Luka, Kaito, Meiko and "Voyakiloid" Haku are of age, and legitimate character to use in my opinion, so long as they're not portrayed sexually as underage.

I made this account just to say;
Thank you.

Milovana hasn't been as enjoyable since all your teases got removed, and to see you back made this already quite good day absolutely fantastic!

Just did the tease there, really good job!

The writing style was very fitting, and the word choice of Gumi was well portrayed for the tease.

Despite seeing the comments about the "surprise", I didn't guess it until the end xD


I also enjoy that those who breached the point of no return weren't told "EWW GROSS GET OUT OF HERE" like what is common in some teases, but instead kept the creative situation and in turn made victory out of failure. Though please, do not stop making teases like this! All I request is that you try to abide Milovana rules so that they may stay up - i.e. no younger than 18, and not portrayed younger. You have a knack for writing nice stories for these teases, and it would be a shame to see you disappear.

Loved the tease, thank you so much for writing it!

Just had another go - brilliant. Nice work.

Thank you all for your kind words and PMs! ^ ^ Now that it is summertime I might write more teases, but I have no idea about what girls to use! If anyone has any suggestions then maybe I could do those! I don't know what I'll write about next, but I am so glad you guys liked my Gumi tease. ^ ^;

love love LOVE IT!

You know I do, your writing is excelent and the twist was just mindblowing

Thank you so much for your hard work, and that you stayed strong after that legal problem with milo. You showed them how it is done! :)

The only sad thing is, that this isn't the start of a series *grins*

Just my two cents, but I wouldn't recommend using Rin, since she's underage =/

Here's character's off the top of my head....

VOCALOIDS;
- More Gumi
- IA
- Meiko (you'd have to really be good at writing for this one, heh)

Others;
- Any Touhou Project character ~ Momiji, Aya, Suika etc
- Newly popular characters (Wii Fit Trainer? XD Oh Miyamoto, I'd love to see your face right now)
- Makise Kurisu / Suzuha (Steins;Gate)
- Horo (Spice & Wolf)

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EDIT
As for story implementation, you could very much apply the character's own personalities within the writing style, and even open doors for new tags in your teases. For example; Aya is a trigger happy photographer and journalist within Gensokyo, whereas Kurisu is a mature, yet sometimes devious mad scientist.

Have fun with it, and I look forward to any future teases! ~

I have never really been an animation fan, but this has certainly changed my mind.

I love this tease, I am unfortunate not to have seen your earlier teases bit if this is something to go buy then I expect that they where very good indeed.

Thais gets a 5 from me. I am moving on to your other tease next, well once my tiny excuse of a cock recovers.

Keep it up. Xxxx

Wow! I did not see that twist coming at all. I was so proud of myself that I had the stamina to endure until the end so

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not being allowed to cum at all was a total shock lol. I never denied myself an orgasm before and I never thought I ever would - especially after stroking and edging for such a long time so this is a completely new experience for me. I was still on the edge when I read that I wouldn't be allowed to cum lol. I followed the tease word for word and it was really hard and equally engaging. My cock is still twitching and leaking pre-cum as I type this and I finished the tease over 20 minutes ago. :D I really hope that I'll get another chance to cum soon.

I also loved that "biggest fan" wordplay at the beginning. The level of interaction was stellar as well. It felt like she was actually reacting to me. :3 Fantastic tease. It totally owned me in the best sense possible.

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I actually bought into the idea of wanting to be controlled and denied by her. :O