there are a few spelling errors
which frankly I don't care about much but one of which was
StroCking which apparently is a valid spelling sometimes but a better one is stroking (no C)
Maybe it is an accent she is talking with?? shrug I don't care if you leave it or not, that is your decision.
But you really should change the large text pages
just the third page was just a little tricky to read unless the tease was full screen the last sentence was almost off my screen.
"you must completely naked. No earrings, necklace, watch, nothing except your cock cage)"
all you would have to do is shift the position of that one to make it a bit easier to read.
All this is Very minor stuff it is a Great tease!!
Your teases is scoring Over 4.0 which means that a Lot of people Like it!
so good news!
I thought you did a good job picking your model an pictures and the tease itself was well written!
nice
to Milovana with your first post and tease!!
hope to see more work from you!