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Does anyone else have problems with this tease?
It seems to me that it is stuck in a loop..?

Spoiler: show

After you have to lay down with your ass up against the wall, it goes back a few pages.

hmmm maybe your supposed to orgasm on yourself
and that why there is a loop?

also there is no sound (that I heard)
for stroke to my beat
after she is laying in the bed

second time no sound with her on bed

there a lot of sound missing for on the bed session
I know how hard it is to link sounds
so you may want to look for a small typo
since the sound worked fine earlier. (counted a third time, no sound)

there is No sound/beet when you put ass on wall either...

also I really wish you would correct the spelling of one word
the word is: crap.... you mean to say craMp.. does your body craMp up...
normally I don't give a care about spelling but crap=shit
kind of a really BIG difference

and yes it looped for me too
so there may be some small glitches
but overall a good tease.

I just previewed it, by the way, because of the post.
but good model, well written, just need to correct a few typos.
both in the words
and the code of the tease.
double check you sound lines for the later half of tease.

Yeah, it looks like page 48 targets page 33 instead of page 49.

I miss the beat in the later part.

And yes it is looping. Or how long should it take?

Hey guys sorry for the delay but I have been screwing around with this tease a lot (its my first tease). I was getting a ton of errors in nyx that kept looping my pages so I tried an offline editor that fixed everything but now the text is to small and I'm waiting for a fix. I will fix it as soon as something changes.

Thanks,

Should be all fixed now

Hey!
I just wanted to say, I really like this tease. It is well written and I like your choice of the model. Did this tease when it was looping and was very sad but when I found out that you fixed it I gave it another run and am really pleased with it. Did it two times since then.

I'd definetely like another one in this style.

As for me this is what I liked and didn't like about it:
Pros:
-metronome
-shoelace
-choice of model
-multiple edges
-good balance of breaks and stroking
-storyline
-sounds!
-duration

Cons:
-she being my direct sister (maybe its just me having a real sister that this fantasy bothers me)
-shooting it "everywhere" was a little ... well in one way very hot because it really gets you going... but at the same time it made me not really enjoy the orgasm because I didn't want to shoot all over my bed. and after such a rather long tease it was quite a load.

Suggestions for a follow up:
-maybe make it the girlfriend, stepmom or stepsis. to still have that part of having the chance of getting caught it could be masturbating and edging in a somewhat public place where someone could walk in on you.
-cum in a certain way, like on a plate, in a glass, on your face... maybe even mouth with optional or forced cum eating or simply come in a condom
-maybe icecubes or a little anal play, maybe include toys

Long story short I liked it and I would love a follow up! :)

Hey Mabene,

Thanks for the feeback! I know the sister thing is a little weird. I was thinking cousin next time or something. Also glad to hear that that crazy tease is finally working! Took me so much time with all the errors. I don't think Nyx liked all the sounds I used.

Cumming in something is something that I could use too.


Really appreciate the feedback and thanks for doing the tease.