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FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 1:32 am
by Slaveboy90
Hey,
this is my first flash tease, and a start of a new series. Every kind of criticism is welcome. Please tell me here your opinion and what I could do better. If you find mistakes in grammar pls tell me, english is not my first language :) If you have a special wish what should coming in the next tease, you can post it here too. So you can control the story a little bit if you want ;)
Hope you like it !
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 2:51 am
by Quiet Linda
Welcome
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 4:47 am
by sleepysub
the link at the end doesnt seem to be working... sadly
Liked it otherwise, I like the references to doggy and such :)
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 10:02 am
by Slaveboy90
The link is working ... tested it right now ! try again ;)
In the next parts there will be more stroking. And I will try to make the tease more complex ;)
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 1:21 pm
by sleepysub
okies
*restarts the tease to play it again* :D
EDIT: I am getting an 500 internal server error when I go to that link :(
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 1:55 pm
by Slaveboy90
Hmmm...for me it works...how can i embed a video in the tease ? maybe than it will work
Edit: change the link, maybe now it works. I have try to embed a video direct in the tease (with the thread
"Nyx(Flash Tease Editor) Tips and Tricks") but it doesn´t work...I will try to fix it !
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 2:59 pm
by sleepysub
yea video embedding seems a bit tricky and I dont think you should bother with that as its quite buggy and not officially supported I think.
The new link works however and very much looking forward to more of the teases!
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 3:58 pm
by Slaveboy90
I am working on part 2 right now. Will be more stroking this time (I think thats the main point for the bad rating)
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 6:32 pm
by sleepysub
part 2 seems to have an endless loop with th page "Now smack as fast as you can! remember the guy in the basement... [more]"
loved it so far though :)
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 7:52 pm
by redfred
sleepysub wrote:part 2 seems to have an endless loop with th page "Now smack as fast as you can! remember the guy in the basement... [more]"
loved it so far though :)
same thing for me .. endless loop part 2 on page that begins "Now smack as fast as you can! "
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 7:59 pm
by inri2k6
I like your style of webtease. Liked your Lanny series as well. Please continue making them.
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2012 9:27 pm
by Slaveboy90
Loop is fixed !
Thanks for your posts :) Glad to hear you like it !
Re: FB: Meet Goddess Lisa Ann
Posted: Fri Dec 28, 2012 2:11 am
by KC83
I really like the storyline and the direction this is going.
I would like to see more pictures, it seems like we look at each picture for a very long time.
Also each of the teases seemed very short.
As far as what I would like to see in the future. I really like nipple torture and pain.